Playground Poetry

August 21, 2009
By sarahxinsane921 SILVER, St. Charles, Missouri
sarahxinsane921 SILVER, St. Charles, Missouri
5 articles 4 photos 10 comments

I'll Tell You It's Okay,
I'll Tell You I'm Just Fine,
But Really I'll Be Sitting Here,
Wishing You Were Still Mine.

-July 22, 2009


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on May. 4 2011 at 5:23 pm
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

this is one of my favorite poems i've read. EVER!! wow, it's so simple yet so true and extremely powerful :) lots of girls can easily relate ;) would you mind commenting on some of my work please? thanks and keep writing, this piece was brilliant :)

Duckie430 said...
on Dec. 8 2010 at 9:27 am
Duckie430, Riverside, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
“The secret to life is being who you are and being happy with who you are.”
"Whatever does not kill you only makes you stronger."

i loved this. simple & to the point, easily relatable, good emotion, rhyming...all in all, good job :)

on Nov. 2 2010 at 10:06 pm
Bnubbs PLATINUM, Goshen, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
Let it be! All you need is love!

ditto. loved it. extremely true

on May. 12 2010 at 3:36 pm
munkyman95 GOLD, Medway, Other
18 articles 1 photo 100 comments

Favorite Quote:
I will become, what I know I am' Michael Jordan

short, simple, expressive, exceptional, brilliant

on Mar. 7 2010 at 9:26 pm
hbananabread93 GOLD, Lyons, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
it is what it is
&&
dance like EVERYBODY is watching

i really like this, because a lot of people think that poetry has to be long and extravagant. it doesnt. it just need to tell how you feel and this definitely does this. great work. and if you get the chance, would you mind checking out some of my stuff? especially "the carousel"

thanks!! =D

lovetoread said...
on Nov. 28 2009 at 6:56 pm
All I can say this is Awsom! to the point

Lostinbooks said...
on Sep. 15 2009 at 9:08 am
Lostinbooks, Arcadia, California
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I like it. It's short but condensed...you don't need a ton of words to get the point across...and it leaves a stronger impression on the reader then a longer poem on the same topic would.

on Sep. 12 2009 at 10:58 pm
sarahxinsane921 SILVER, St. Charles, Missouri
5 articles 4 photos 10 comments
Thank You So Much For Both The Negitive And Positive Feedback. Everyone Has An Oppinion And Both Help Me Grow As A Write.

This Is Probably The Simplist Piece Of Work Ive Ever Written, (Hence The Name, 'PLAYGROUND Poetry." ) I wanted It To Be Simple.

So Thank You All So Much.

on Sep. 12 2009 at 8:22 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

This is really good.

Schubster said...
on Sep. 12 2009 at 3:20 pm
short, but very powerful. I doubt I could think of this if I were five, so don't worry about that comment :) keep writing!~

on Sep. 12 2009 at 12:13 pm
Lucky7337 SILVER, Paris, Tennessee
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this poem, i'm sure, relates to many people across the world. just because it does not relate to you does not mean that you have to discredit this. it is a very well-written poem, and Aubrey O. was right- the length of a poem does not determine the depth of the content.

on Sep. 12 2009 at 11:30 am
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
" It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. "
Albus Dumbledore


See, we really DON'T have anything to fear but fear itself!

well now it's the 3rd, but o well.

on Sep. 12 2009 at 11:28 am
wordweaver96 PLATINUM, Winchester, Kentucky
37 articles 2 photos 255 comments

Favorite Quote:
" It is not our abilities but our choices that show who we truly are. "
Albus Dumbledore


See, we really DON'T have anything to fear but fear itself!

the first comment was really mean and not true unless his 5 yr old brother is a genius. this is a good poem

sadie912 said...
on Sep. 12 2009 at 10:07 am
it was ok.simple but it still told u all u needed 2 kno about how dat person feels.and it could realte 2 anybody.if dat makes sense

on Sep. 11 2009 at 6:46 pm
Raindance-Now BRONZE, Cedar Crest, New Mexico
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This was a great poem! Kudos to you Jaquie, for standing up for it. The length of a poem does not determine the depth of it's content.

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on Sep. 8 2009 at 4:16 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

My hats off to your brother for achieving this level of genius at such a young age. It is not often that such an advanced poet is found. Your parents must be so proud. I offer my sympathies to you. It must have been difficult maturing in the shadow of such an intelligent sibling who possesses a talent that you obviously can't comprehend very skillfully. Its my deepest wish that you will look more into the study of poetry and realize what talent this piece shows.

God bless,

...,


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