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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.



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moonstone said...
Apr. 22, 2009 at 11:24 am
this is a truly amazing poem. you speak to me.
 
porter said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 11:42 am
Just enough power to watch myself fail.. So interesting because it implies you are not totally helpless. Nice job.
 
Donny said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 11:34 am
Again, the repetition grips you. Keep it up. I like your style.
 
spicy lady said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 11:20 am
You have presented this so beautifully one can feel how you have no choice...Love it.
 
marilyn 222 said...
Apr. 21, 2009 at 11:14 am
We have all been there! Great poem.
 
Mimi said...
Apr. 20, 2009 at 11:21 pm
Good description of the loss of hope. We have all been there at some point in our lives--it does get better. Keep on writing to keep yourself focused on what you feel.
 
Meem said...
Apr. 20, 2009 at 10:49 pm
We have all been at this point in our lives--but the good news is--It
does get better. Hang in there and keep writing!!!!
 
faceless said...
Apr. 20, 2009 at 1:14 pm
keep climbing....
 
desilu said...
Apr. 19, 2009 at 2:42 pm
~~this is an excellent poem~~very good~~
 
MweilKrieger said...
Apr. 19, 2009 at 2:50 am
You are the BOSS
 
marilyn222 said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 10:26 pm
So true. Very poignant.
 
Victorious said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 3:40 pm
…the “i” in your poem has successfully subverted and undermined all that he witnesses, all that is, except the poem itself; he was not able to sabotage this insightful poem.
 
Meem said...
Apr. 17, 2009 at 2:06 am
I found the comment that the "Gravity" poem was about "self sabotage" to be very insightful about humans in general.
 
cat123 said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 1:58 pm
I absolutely LOVE "Gravity"!
 
bambini said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 12:32 pm
I love how you have captured the concept. Well done!I look forward to reading more poems by you.
 
travelpro said...
Apr. 16, 2009 at 8:27 pm
Wonderful imagery for a deep and common teenage emotion! Well done!
 
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