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I fall. I climb. I climb and I fall.
But I climb to fall.
I build so I can watch what I make crumble to pieces.
I watch the sand sift through my open fingers.
I let the wave claim my castle as its own.
I let it all come down on me, earth and ocean.
I have just enough power to watch myself fail,
Just enough hope to let my dreams die in my arms,
Over and over.
I am gravity and I pull everything down.




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IamtheshyStargirl said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 3:29 pm:

All of my words are gone today; there is poetry in my heart, but it does not translate well in the open air, the words are born transluscent white and empty, no subatance, no weight.

All I can think to say is 'Wow'. You have described Gravity's voice perfectly.

 
IamtheshyStargirl replied...
Sept. 3, 2011 at 11:36 am :
Haha, thankee kindly :)
 
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ElleNicole said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 11:14 am:

This is amazing. Simply amazing.

Hey, would you mind checking out and rating my poem 'Change'? Thanks if you do. =)

 
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RanaHewezi1998This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 10:33 pm:

that's so sad :( but wonderfully written.

 

 
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Shyzilla said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 9:10 pm:
its so honest which makes it in my opinos extrememly welll written..awesome work
 
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DrownedHopes said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 5:21 pm:
W O W . It almost as though you took my journal && turned it into beautiful , yet powerful words . Thank you for being my hero today .
 
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K.M.S.Shear said...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 8:20 am:
love th way you describe gravity
 
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Echinacea8 said...
May 15, 2011 at 5:18 pm:
this has to be one of my favorite poems I've read on this website.
 
di k replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 10:16 am :
yes! mine too! I am a writer as well. the way you described gravity was crystal clear and beautiful!!
 
DisicpleofChristandJesusEnthusiast replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 3:35 pm :

Yes, I have to agree. The way you described it was beautiful. AMAZING!

 

 
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H0peF1ames said...
May 15, 2011 at 4:07 pm:
Nice use of repetition and a very powerful ending and beginning!
 
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angehuertas27 said...
May 15, 2011 at 2:02 pm:
amazing love the words u put in great job!
 
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TheWicked said...
Apr. 23, 2011 at 10:49 pm:
This is very beautifully wriiten. Keep writing!
 
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luvsoccer3000 said...
Apr. 23, 2011 at 2:40 pm:
wow......words cannot describe how much i love this poem, truly amazing
 
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caedanse said...
Apr. 2, 2011 at 9:56 pm:
Positively mind blowing~ excellent work!
 
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Acalleq This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 3:35 pm:

wow, thats so true, i always catch myself failing before i even try. keep it real, ur poem is true to the bone

 

 

 
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lala15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 8:57 am:
this is such a deep poem--how did it not make the mag?
 
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swimmergirlie13 said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 8:27 am:
that was an awesome poem!!! love it!!! keep writing!
 
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his_country_girl said...
Apr. 1, 2011 at 7:40 am:
you did amazing! :)
 
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chevy said...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 6:33 pm:
words can not describe what you have done here. simply amazing!
 
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ashleyn said...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 2:59 pm:
I LOVE IT! I especially liked how you made the whole thing into a similie at the end...wonderfully done. Great job!
 
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