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Pray

Don't look back on the painful past
Savor the little memories you have
Times might get unbearable
Look to the bible for a parable
For when you feel like you can't take it anymore
And the devil keeps knocking at your door
You think you can't stand another day
Get down on your knees and pray




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Wolfayne said...
Jun. 7, 2009 at 10:38 pm:
It's pretty good, but lose the rhyming. Rhyming puts up a barrier and limit on what you can say in a poem.

Please look at my poetry! It would mean a lot to me! Oops. That rhymed didn't it? Oh well! ;>
 
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Jayelon C. said...
May 3, 2009 at 11:08 pm:
I like this poem. Its deep and its true. Keep up the good work Rachel :-)
 
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RachelW. said...
May 3, 2009 at 10:46 pm:
Thanks!
 
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EdytD said...
May 3, 2009 at 8:17 pm:
As soon as your poem goes online, let me know - I'd love to read it! I dont think it's on teenink yet (b/c i couldn't find it), but i'll check back soon to look at it. Great job on this one!
 
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EdytD said...
Apr. 23, 2009 at 9:11 pm:
thanks for the comment! If you want to see the rest of them, you're welcome to! (just use the link I gave you and click - more by this contributor.)

Are you putting out another poem soon?
 
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EdytD said...
Apr. 14, 2009 at 10:05 pm:
I like it a lot - it expresses hope and dreams, and shows that there is an end to darkness. Good job!
I'd love if you take a look at some of my poetry. I think you can click my name, but if not, here's a link to one: TeenInk.com/raw/Poetry/article/97934/Secret/. Thanks! :D
 
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