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High School

I walk down theses crowded halls
nobody meets my eye.
I smile and say hello
they walk on
They run by
no one cares
running and running.
too quick to notice,
too fast to care
faster and faster
until they fall of the universe
where there is
no more



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lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 28, 2009 at 5:23 pm
Well this is very good. I could relate to your poem. You start off rhyming then stop...It's cool! I have written several poems like that...so keep up the good work!!
*******p.s. if you have time, please check out my poems. rate, comment please. much appreciated!
 
kissingdawn331 said...
Mar. 20, 2009 at 5:55 pm
JulianHale- thank you for your comment...it wassn't mean...umm when exactly does it ryme? I didn't notice
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JillianHale said...
Mar. 20, 2009 at 12:57 am
I really like this one, however i think that the rhyming is sorta off. i know poems dont "have" to rhyme (mine dont) but i think you should stick with one or the other. i swear im not trying to be mean, dont take this the wrong way. cuz you rhyme in the beginning but then stop... i liked it otherwise though :]
 
musicgirl757 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 15, 2009 at 12:19 am
Nice, I really like it!
 
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