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Heartbroken

Her heart trembles with sadness,
As they pull the strings of her heart out one by one,
Unraveling her very soul,
Her veins pulse with the agony of grief,
Eyes sting in protest,
Trying not to let the tears cascade down her face,
Her lips quiver,
Teeth sink in,
All in attempt to hold back,
One slip is all it takes,
Her breathing falters,
Coming in short gasps,
All in a wave,
Her emotions break free,
Her tears fall like raindrops after a dead spell,
They roll down the slopes and hills of her smooth face,
Splattering on the floor,
She stands gasping for air,
Grieving with love,
Dying for understanding.



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jenx0x3 said...
Nov. 12, 2009 at 5:05 pm
i think this is one of your best it is my favorite i can just picture it in my head it is beautiful work
 
pinkvolleyballgirl replied...
Nov. 12, 2009 at 9:31 pm
thanks so much!!!!
 
jenx0x3 replied...
Nov. 14, 2009 at 1:38 pm
anytime! <3
 
~*The-Broken-Hearted-Girl*~ said...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 2:18 pm
this is still my favorite. :)
 
pinkvolleyballgirl replied...
Oct. 14, 2009 at 6:10 pm
YOUR FAVORITE? thanks so much everyone. If you want updates on my writings, follow my twitter:)
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
Jun. 22, 2009 at 10:36 pm
thanks!
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 21, 2009 at 5:36 pm
in a book!? thats even BETTER! congrats! =)
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
Jun. 18, 2009 at 8:01 pm
thanks windswift. No, sallyloco, it hasnt been featured on teenink. I wish it would:) But it is being published in a book, so thats good!!!!! Thanks for the comments!
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 16, 2009 at 2:39 am
I read it again! YAY ME! Did this one make top voted before? It should have if it didn't it's really good!
 
windswift This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 15, 2009 at 3:59 pm
i liked this poem alot, it describes the uncertanty of love and how it can effect anyone. i also liked how it described that when her heart had been broken she didnt want to let the emotions come forth, but couldnt hold them back. it drew my attention to the meaning and the poem itself. i give it a five.
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
Jun. 14, 2009 at 5:56 pm
wow im glad you love it so much lol
This one is being published, but not my fav. Oh well!
thanks for commenting!!!
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 11, 2009 at 2:39 pm
i just felt like reading it again. I love this poem... =)
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
Jun. 8, 2009 at 5:10 pm
haha thanks sallyloco. Im glad you could feel the emotion. Thanks for commenting!!!:)
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 5, 2009 at 7:05 pm
O.O this was very deep I just about cried. I was leaning in the seat like "woah" lolz.
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
Jun. 2, 2009 at 10:03 pm
okay Ian, ill try some stuff. Thanks Rachel!!! Love you!!! lol
 
Ian_S. said...
Jun. 1, 2009 at 1:38 am
Hey, I'll look for you in the creative communications book! I'm not sure how we can talk cause teen ink restricts people from giving out personal info
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
May 29, 2009 at 10:06 pm
oops Dalya D is now Golden D! Either way, thanks for commenting on ALL of my work!!! :)
 
Ian_S. said...
May 29, 2009 at 8:16 pm
Hey, I'll look for your poem in Creative Communications! I really haven't been published any where. I did win a Gold Key Regional Scholastic prize for "The Orchard of Hope". I'm not sure how I can email you...Go to my "About Me" section. I think I found a way.
 
Rachel K. said...
May 29, 2009 at 3:29 am
This one is also amazing. It is going in our yearbook! EXCITING (:
 
pinkvolleyballgirl said...
May 27, 2009 at 9:51 pm
Thanks Dalya D! I tried to capture all the sad emotions in this poem. its universal because im sure we all have felt this way. Im really glad u like it!!! thanks!
 
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