You Said That You Loved Me...

January 18, 2009
By bigjwill GOLD, Louisville, Kentucky
bigjwill GOLD, Louisville, Kentucky
14 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are."- C.S. Lewis


You said that you loved me,
that you always would;
that we were connected,
together for good.

You were my whole life,
my one wish come true;
my life would be nothing,
if it was without you.

But then you broke my heart,
you took your’s back;
I cried and I begged,
that you wouldn’t pack.

You said that you loved me,
that you always would;
that we were connected,
together for good.



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on Nov. 18 2009 at 10:21 am
AquariusSunandMoon SILVER, Sublette, Illinois
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I like how the beginning repeats at the end :) It also holds a lot of feeling, it sweeps you up in it.

There was just one grammatical error I saw: 'your's' should be 'yours'

bigjwill GOLD said...
on Sep. 15 2009 at 9:02 pm
bigjwill GOLD, Louisville, Kentucky
14 articles 1 photo 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You're entirely bonkers. But I'll tell you a secret. All the best people are."- C.S. Lewis

thank you so much! please pass this poem on!

chocolet said...
on Jul. 7 2009 at 9:45 pm
this is great, don't stop writing your, you have talent.

Debaser GOLD said...
on Jun. 28 2009 at 8:05 pm
Debaser GOLD, Marlboro, Vermont
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awwwwwwwwwww

Carrie said...
on Jun. 28 2009 at 5:48 pm
Jared thats awesome!!!!!!

Lucretia said...
on Feb. 14 2009 at 12:43 am
Great! Strikes a deep cord within the heart!

Betty Joy said...
on Feb. 14 2009 at 12:27 am
Fantastic, this boy has trememdous talent! Keep the poetry flowing!

Tlittle said...
on Jan. 31 2009 at 2:39 pm
Awesome poem look forward to reading more from you. You have been blest with great writing skills!! Keep it up

Maria said...
on Jan. 30 2009 at 12:27 pm
What a beautiful inspiration you have!


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