You Said That You Loved Me...

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You said that you loved me,
that you always would;
that we were connected,
together for good.

You were my whole life,
my one wish come true;
my life would be nothing,
if it was without you.

But then you broke my heart,
you took your’s back;
I cried and I begged,
that you wouldn’t pack.

You said that you loved me,
that you always would;
that we were connected,
together for good.





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AquariusSun&Moon This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 18, 2009 at 10:21 am
I like how the beginning repeats at the end :) It also holds a lot of feeling, it sweeps you up in it.
There was just one grammatical error I saw: 'your's' should be 'yours'
 
chocolet said...
Jul. 7, 2009 at 9:45 pm
this is great, don't stop writing your, you have talent.
 
Marty C. said...
Jun. 28, 2009 at 8:05 pm
awwwwwwwwwww
 
Carrie said...
Jun. 28, 2009 at 5:48 pm
Jared thats awesome!!!!!!
 
Lucretia said...
Feb. 14, 2009 at 12:43 am
Great! Strikes a deep cord within the heart!
 
bigjwill replied...
Sept. 15, 2009 at 9:02 pm
thank you so much! please pass this poem on!
 
Betty Joy said...
Feb. 14, 2009 at 12:27 am
Fantastic, this boy has trememdous talent! Keep the poetry flowing!
 
Tlittle said...
Jan. 31, 2009 at 2:39 pm
Awesome poem look forward to reading more from you. You have been blest with great writing skills!! Keep it up
 
Maria said...
Jan. 30, 2009 at 12:27 pm
What a beautiful inspiration you have!
 
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