Home Sweet Home MAG

January 7, 2009
By Hayley Nolan, North Barrington, IL

A thousand miles from
a place that’s supposed to be a “home”
when it’s just a house
sheltering four people
that have nothing in common
except some DNA.



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on Mar. 4 2012 at 9:18 am
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Wow...a place that's supposed to be home to a person is actually just a house holding four perfect strangers. The image we all have of a place called home is not true. It seems like an illusion.

on Nov. 21 2011 at 1:37 pm
bookthief PLATINUM, Concord, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is the art of drawing without an eraser." -- John W. Gardener

I totally agree... just saying that this author may have felt that this is all that's necessary. But i do understand what you're saying.

on Nov. 21 2011 at 9:01 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

simple style* sorry for my typo.

on Nov. 21 2011 at 8:59 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

yeah, I completely get that, but it's not the length that matters to me, it's the way that the message is shown. when you use metaphors or a twisted useage of words, it shows how much thought you've put to it, and how much you've learnt from one thing. and I really like the simply style or writing, I write like that too sometimes, but it only works when the message is something only few people know. Then the simply style plays a huge role, and it hits home like nothing else.

byebye said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 8:17 pm
byebye, Nevermore, Other
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I liked this poem...liked it, but didn't love it. I think the topic is very meaningful, but it got lost a little in the way you wrote this.

I would say you could improve this a little. Don't weigh it down too much, but try to capture the emotions better and maybe don't go through it so quick.

Again, I do like this poem...I just think it could be tweaked.


Dreammer GOLD said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 7:35 pm
Dreammer GOLD, Montrose, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Love is like quicksand the further you fall the harder it is to get out

Veary short it was good though veary straight forward look at my work if you'd like

on Nov. 15 2011 at 12:57 pm
bookthief PLATINUM, Concord, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"Life is the art of drawing without an eraser." -- John W. Gardener

I think you could say that with a lot of art... what matters is that this author had the idea first, wrote it down first, and decided that this simplicity and clarity of style was more to his/her liking than something longer that a different writer might prefer.

Cielo4ever said...
on Oct. 24 2011 at 2:44 pm
I agree...it wasn't super special but it was cool. Had you put more detail...I think your entire POINT may have been to be so straight up but i think anyone could have said that

on Oct. 24 2011 at 9:14 am
dia.dreamer GOLD, Kochi, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I saw an angel in the marble and carved until I set him free." - Michelangelo
"I took a deep breath and listened to the old bray of my heart: I am, I am, I am." - Sylvia Plath

I honestly did not find this as amazing or mindblowing as everyone else who commented here seems to...I mean, it was written a little too obviously, and the meaning is nice, I guess, but this poem could definitely have been written in a MUCH better way.

on Oct. 9 2011 at 9:16 am
devikaarora GOLD, New Delhi, Hawaii
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Favorite Quote:
Dont tell me sky is the limit when there are footsteps on the moon !

W.O.W
Thats all i have to say !

simpleasthat said...
on Sep. 10 2011 at 7:07 am
simpleasthat, Lovettsville, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"My life is like a carousel. Always moving forward, never going back."

very good use of words for such a short poem! it's very relatable. love it!

hope95 SILVER said...
on Aug. 26 2011 at 10:44 pm
hope95 SILVER, Hamilton, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
life is hard but death is cruel so put your big girl boots on and deal with it. my life has been harsh but im learning to deal with it one day at a time. life is like a box of chocolates, you never know watchya gonna get:)

wow. i kno exactly wat u mean. i absolutely loved this.

on Jul. 28 2011 at 8:53 pm
dancer11srubin GOLD, Long Grove, Illinois
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short and to the point. nice work :)

Rene_38 BRONZE said...
on Jul. 15 2011 at 10:02 pm
Rene_38 BRONZE, Garden Grove, California
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perfect. i feel this way sometimes about my house.

on May. 23 2011 at 10:08 am
yourmom08 SILVER, Vernon, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"everyone will eventually hurt you, you just have to find the right person worth suffering for"

nice poem :)

on Mar. 12 2011 at 3:47 pm
Beachgirl1 PLATINUM, Bellevue, Washington
32 articles 4 photos 178 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If You Don't Fight Back, You've Already Lost."
"Don't suppress Laughter, it goes to your thighs."

 i love this poem. short, to the point, interesting

on Feb. 2 2011 at 2:38 pm
silentvocal SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't try to fix what isn't broken

yea exactly-it's nice and short, and the idea behind it is so true-I'm sure most of us can relate to this feeling and the fact that often our home isn't all that special and there are other places that deserve such a name as home than the house or aptartment or neighborhood we live in.

Apeggy BRONZE said...
on Feb. 2 2011 at 10:36 am
Apeggy BRONZE, Albion, New York
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Favorite Quote:
A.B.D"A Beautiful Dream"

Short and sweet. Sometimes i feel the same at home but beyond words a home is still a home infrared with love.  This is a great piece! 

on Jan. 8 2011 at 11:48 am
Jessie-Mo SILVER, Mo. City, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Mama always said life was like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get."

Short poems are great, as long as they can contain all the emotion that a longer poem could have. In some ways, shorter poems are better because of the fact that they can contain so many emotions in so few words. It is like the full package, but is less time-consuming.

on Jan. 8 2011 at 11:45 am
Jessie-Mo SILVER, Mo. City, Texas
6 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Mama always said life was like a box of chocolates. You never know what you're gonna get."

This poem is great. It is short, and gets to the point, and it really touched my heart. Sometimes I feel the way you do, and it can hurt. Continue writing, please.


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