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Suffocating

January 8, 2009
By Anonymous

What I see around me
is piling up
beside me,
around me,
everywhere I look.

The conflict,
the pain,
is the life I live.
With the giant mound of problems, there comes a breaking point.

I'm screaming and screaming;
it's building and building,
thrown at me
over and over.
This is not what I want;
please help me out of this hole.

What I see around me
is a world
that's too small to matter,
yet so big
that one small disturbance
can shatter it.

No one can really understand
what I'm going through.
They say they do
with a pat of the back,
but they don't know what it feels like.

It's too much to bear,
too overwhelming to see
what has happened to me
but it's there.

What this all comes down to
is just the suffocation
of all the world
crashing down on me.

I'm screaming and screaming,
and no one can hear me;
I need to let it out
somehow.

Please help to set me
free.

The author's comments:
This is dedicated to one of my best friends, Denise. I wrote it in my Geometry class, after she told me about all the drama that had been happening to her all year. It was like she had been bombarded with trouble after trouble after trouble, and I just had to write something about it. Reading it again, I guess it could also be talking about a girl who got raped. (i.e. Lucky by Alice Sebold)

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Rebecca L. said...
on Feb. 17 2009 at 4:43 am
Thank you! The 4th line in the second stanza was too long, so the last word went to a 5th line. And yes, it was supposed to end with free. :)

Somnio Avis said...
on Feb. 17 2009 at 3:00 am
Argh, the drama....well, this poem certainly screams "I've got a bunch of problems help me out" in terms of how the speaker was feeling.



Freestyle poetry? Definitely not in "I am a pirate with a wooden leg" style, XD. Wo xi huan.



The line:

"what I see is a world that's too small to matter, yet so big that one small disturbance can shatter it"

I especially like.



Hm, the 4th line in the second stanza...is it suppose to be very long? Also, the last stanza's very adrupt in it's ending - is it suppose to be like that?



However, the general feel I get from it is definitely angsty, which is most likely what you're trying to convey, given the title of "Suffocating". ;) Good poem overall,though, so keep up the good work!



And tell Denise that life'll look up soon. :)