Rant

January 3, 2009
By Christina BRONZE, Clifton, Virginia
Christina BRONZE, Clifton, Virginia
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The smile you see upon my face
and the friends and the words and the place
are perfect and happy.
Everyone loves.
Everyone lives.
No one knows.
No one knows that this smile is a pretense.
It crept upon me
and I don’t know how to make it go away.
I’m dying inside.
Not another day,
with those cries and lies
that I know are hidden behind our masks.
There are so many secret conflicts
with ourselves and everyone around us.
The smiles
are pretty,
all burdened
with pity.
Not another moment of these lies,
these troubles in disguise.
Disguise your problems, baby.
Maybe they’ll go away.
Maybe they’ll suffocate in the depths or your mind.
Maybe they’ll drown in the tears of your heart.
Maybe they’ll burn in the fires of your soul.
Maybe they’ll just
disappear.
Because maybe I love you,
and maybe you love me,
and maybe this is all for nothing,
and maybe we’re just a bunch of kids,
and maybe we’re dying to know what love is.
I want to know what love is.
Will you be my love?
And can I be yours?
And
what is this we’re fighting for?
We are
fighting for lies,
fighting for love,
fighting for another chance,
another chance to make our days bright,
another chance to make our lives right.
This will never be right.
We will never be alright.
There’s always something
or someone.
She’s doing this with him;
He said that about her.
What a life.
What a world.
Words are weapons and we wield them without care.
We slit the wrists with knives
as easily as we slit the throats with words.
Take a stab at me, baby.
I dare you.
I’m here waiting for you
with open arms and open eyes,
smile on my face and my heart in its place.
I’d take it all for you.
I’m taking it all for you.
Lay it all on me.
It’s all on me.
My smile is on
so nothing is wrong.
Nothing can be wrong with her.
She’s the sunshiny hippie lover
who dances through life with the flowers in her hair
and love at her side.
Nothing can be wrong with her.
But
something’s wrong with me,
because I want him to love me
and I want him to understand
and I want to be cool with her
and I want my boy to be a man
and I want my friends to love themselves
and I want everyone to know
and I want my tears to come bravely
and I want my lies to show.
You think we don’t know life
or problems.
We’re just a bunch of kids.
But that’s exactly our problem.
We’re just a bunch of kids
and we don’t know what to do about it
anyway.


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KylieK GOLD said...
on May. 23 2015 at 4:35 pm
KylieK GOLD, Mt. Washington, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
"To love is to surpass one's self."

Oh, God. I just love this.

on Oct. 6 2014 at 4:12 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

Wow. This is just ... powerful and full of depth. I can connect to it, a lot. This is just amazing and wonderful and phenomenal.  I hope more of your writing is coming; you are amazing. I love your poem, a lot. Thank you so, so much for sharing this. :)

on Mar. 20 2014 at 11:25 am
writinggirl20 PLATINUM, Marksville, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
What I say only comes straight from my mind, i do not judge. (a quote by me)

i like the point of view you did in this poem. its full of expression . keep it up

on Dec. 30 2011 at 5:39 pm
Pamplemousse SILVER, Gilbert, Arizona
7 articles 1 photo 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To be happy, Don't do whatever you like, Like whatever you do" -James Barrie (author of Peter Pan)

Wow. This is so amazing. I feel that way alot, like you feel like you're just putting on a perfect facade and you wish someone would see. and also I like how you said that we're just kids or whatever. Sometimes I feel like we understand way more than other people realize and we really have seen more than others think. Okay, sorry for that super long comment, but I pretty much love this poem. The End :)

on Dec. 18 2011 at 9:53 am
fictitious-quandary GOLD, Orlando, Florida
18 articles 5 photos 83 comments

Favorite Quote:
Knowing is not enough; we must apply.
Willing is not enough; we must do.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

"Whether you think you can or you think you can't, you're right"
- Henry Ford

Good job. Great writing keep it up.

on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:10 pm
taylor.nichole SILVER, Bakersfield, California
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Favorite Quote:
I restore myself when I'm alone -Maralin Monroe
iv'e always been misrepresented. You know, I could dress in a clown costume and laugh with the happy people but they'd still say i'm a dark personality. - Tim Burton

i have read all your poetry and i think you are an AMAZING writer! this is one of my favorites along with Jerk <3 your an inspiration and i hope to read more:)

Cassidy D. said...
on Nov. 26 2011 at 11:58 am
I wrote something sort of like this...just not nearly as beautifully written. Love it

homes14 said...
on Apr. 12 2011 at 5:57 pm
love it! its so true!

l.iney DIAMOND said...
on Mar. 11 2011 at 2:40 pm
l.iney DIAMOND, Shrewsbury, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
100% of shots not taken won't go in. -Wayne Gretzky

This is so amazing and the feeling you put into it is very strong as you read it.

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Lonleydandy said...
on Mar. 7 2011 at 7:25 pm

Fantastic.

 

 

Enough said.


on Jan. 3 2011 at 7:10 pm
shy-writer GOLD, Spotsylvania, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"We're young. We don't need, a boy to love, hold, kiss. We won't always be able to relax and be kids, but we'll always be able to love. So I'm going to get out there and liven up this world, leave my mark, make a difference." -Anonymous

Wow...This poem describes, like exactly how I feel about everything right now...THIS IS AWESOME!!! :0

on Nov. 9 2010 at 9:34 pm
xBaByGiRrL22x PLATINUM, Pearl River, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"The goal isn't to live forever, but create something that will."
"If you wanna go, baby let's go; if you wanna rock, I'm ready to roll.''
"No one ever said it'd be easy. They just said it'd be worth it." <3

uhh....WOWW. this is incredible. i couldnt stop readingg. youve got talent. plzz keep writingg!! ;D

on Sep. 27 2010 at 1:31 pm
NothingButAli GOLD, Silver Lake, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"The best things in life are better left unseen. that's why we close our eyes when we cry, kiss, and dream"- Anonymous

well um... WOW! reading this brings back alot of pain from my life. and some that i curently have. but thank you. im glad that someone else has the courage to tell people how it is. its good to know im not alone in the fight for teen rights!

on Jul. 8 2010 at 12:48 am
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
52 articles 0 photos 280 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

I wanted to add this as a favorite..except that I dont know how. lol. I'm completely helpless with technology sometimes.

on Jul. 8 2010 at 12:44 am
MercedesXO DIAMOND, South Easton, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
"I realize that life is risks. It's acknowledging the past but looking forward. It's taking chances that we will make mistakes but believeing we all deserve to be forgiven."
-The Dead Tossed Waves.

i recognize your talent immediately and love the way you choose to create and direct this poem. I love the way it contradicts life and the struggles we go through as not only kids/teens..but people. Also, that you mention one of the biggest problems IS that we are "just kids". Some thrown about phrase trying to excuse our thoughts and intentions as kids/teens. That we can not fall in love, we can not BE in love..but we can. And you portray that. Nice work:) I just recently joined and my poems havent been accepted to the site yet, but when they are I would LOVE for you to view them and tell me what you think. (and im not just asking so i can have people comment on my stuff..i want your oppinion because your writing and poetry reminds me of mine in a sence..it rings a sort of truth and understanding of a lot of things).

Great Job:)


Jaycie BRONZE said...
on May. 19 2010 at 2:05 pm
Jaycie BRONZE, Poteet, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
" the truth is, live is a crazy ride.. an nothing is guarenteed. "

My favorite :) your an amazing writter..

on May. 10 2010 at 7:35 pm
MusicInMyHeart<3 PLATINUM, Lansdale, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Time will not dim the glory of their deeds...


A heart afraid to love will never learn to dance...


"My mistake, I didn't know to be in love you had to fight to have the upper hand..."

this is so amazing. i love the repetition and randomness of it all and the diction you used is perfect too. i feel like even though it seems kind of like a stream of consciousness, it all makes perfect sense and flows so well. this is really, really great.

on Apr. 15 2010 at 2:37 pm
whisperingofdawn GOLD, Colorado City, Arizona
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i love this. you have inspired me!

on Apr. 11 2010 at 1:38 pm
Whisperer PLATINUM, O&#39Fallon, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather be hated for who i am, than loved for who I'm not~Anonymous

No individual has any right to come into and out of this world without leaving distinct and legit reasons for having passed through.~Anonymous

thisi sreally cool. it's detail and it's amazing and i LOVE it! it explains so much and relates and says almost exactly what i think every day. thank you for this. this is really amazing :)

on Mar. 20 2010 at 9:11 am
shelterisland GOLD, Montclair, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
-Biting's excellent. It's like kissing only there's a winner."-Doctor Who, The Tardis

this was amazing!!!! love it!


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