The Drowning Astronaut MAG

May 28, 2014
By GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments

sky full of teeth
bone white and bleached
leer in the darkness
of shivering galaxies.

too dark to survive
too bright to hide
gasping for air,
spun by an uncaring sky.

scuttling star shards
send their regards
unblinking and cold
in a sky inky and charred.

shut your eyes tight
make your own light,
eyelids a womb,
eyelids a tomb.

Fade into night.



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GreyGirl ELITE said...
on Aug. 28 2014 at 12:21 am
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments
Glad you liked it! I still haven't seen it. Need to get on that :D

on Aug. 27 2014 at 11:00 pm
TargonTheDragon GOLD, Ofallon, Missouri
15 articles 16 photos 292 comments

Favorite Quote:
First dentistry was painless.
Then bicycles were chainless,
Carriages were horseless,
And many laws enforceless.

Next cookery was fireless,
Telegraphy was wireless,
Cigars were nicotineless,
And coffee caffeineless.

Soon oranges were seedless,
The putting green was weedless,
The college boy was hatless,
The proper diet fatless.

New motor roads are dustless,
The latest steel is rustless,
Our tennis courts are sodless,
Our new religion — godless.

whoa!!!! this is awesome! i had the same feelings that Mckay described. Excellent work. (also i need to see gravity as well)

GreyGirl ELITE said...
on Jul. 2 2014 at 5:27 am
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments
Okay, thanks for the reccomendation. I will put it on my summer watch-list :D  

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jun. 30 2014 at 4:11 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

You must watch it! It's dazzling and thrilling and just AGGGGHHHHH! 

GreyGirl ELITE said...
on Jun. 30 2014 at 8:20 am
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments
I haven't watched that movie yet. I need to! I am glad you liked this poem :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on Jun. 24 2014 at 10:24 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
146 articles 0 photos 2260 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Reminds me much of Gravity when Sandra Bullock is swimming uncontrollably in the vast expanses of strarried skies. Loved your imagery: very Imagist of you. I have a affection for stars and eeriely for hopelessness. This poem captures that hopeless feeling. Space is so grand that being caught there all on your own is (if not the worst) one of the worst scenarios and feelings ever. Well done. 

GreyGirl ELITE said...
on May. 30 2014 at 11:12 pm
GreyGirl ELITE, Pohang,Kyungbuk, Other
170 articles 122 photos 392 comments
aww thank you so much. Glad you like it. I'm pretty much done with school for the summer so hopefully, I can write more :D Again, thanks for the compliments!

JRaye PLATINUM said...
on May. 30 2014 at 8:04 pm
JRaye PLATINUM, Dorr, Michigan
43 articles 10 photos 527 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you build your house far enough away from Trouble, then Trouble will never find you."

"Have you ever looked fear in the face and said, 'I just don't care.'?"

You never disappoint, do you? This is great! The imagery is so stunning and creative, Love it! :D




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