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Chaos Theory This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category.

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Carolyn says she believes in angels
while mascara spiders creep thickly along the
heavy baggage beneath her eyes like the
black pitch of the school hallways at night or
the charcoal that she dips her fingernails in and I
remember cheating on my math test that morning
So
I tell her I believe in people.

Roasted honey nut, the color she was born with but
you really wouldn’t know it because of the midnight L’Oréal
she chooses, tragically highlighted with Punk Pink or
Raging Red from a bottle and 15
minutes of waiting –
It spills limply over her black eyes whenever she leans down to write and
Carolyn says she believes in fate.

In planets aligning in the universe and
Feng shui that keeps mice away and prevents ulcers but also
makes a girl fall in love with a boy but
I know all about chemistry and hormones and catalysts so I
think I believe in science.

In reincarnation, she thinks she’ll come back as a bird
Or maybe a peacock and I say I agree when I
see those striped stockings that come to her knees and
neon earrings lifeless at her shoulders but she only laughs …
tells me I never really see her and to
call her later.

Now with the dial tone in my ear
the cold trembling and I’m suffocating on nothing
because I really see her and I
know she believes in the afterlife but
she doesn’t believe in laughter and
the phone just rings and rings and rings …

Carolyn said she believed in angels.

This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. This piece has been published in Teen Ink’s monthly print magazine.

This work has won the Teen Ink contest in its category. This piece won the January 2009 Teen Ink Poetry Contest.




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kittkatbar0676 said...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 1:36 pm:
Wow! The last few lines sent chills down my spine.... Great writing!!!
 
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KiNABABE said...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 11:59 am:
BeautifulLlll
 
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Lucky.Deviant said...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 11:30 am:
simply beautiful
 
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muzyk~luver said...
Feb. 3, 2010 at 9:34 pm:
WOW....This is wonderful
 
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Rachelxx47 said...
Jan. 31, 2010 at 11:43 pm:
I loved this poem. and the last line wasn't repetitive. it was in the past tense while the first line was in the present tense
 
kittkatbar0676 replied...
Feb. 5, 2010 at 1:38 pm :
The last line I think wasn't intended to be repetitive. It was a realization, as the girl holds the phone to her ear and realizes something that her friend said earlier...and so it is in the past tense.
 
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iNKsWorD This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 9:05 am:
Whoa. im not sure i really get the ending but.. whoa. power right there
 
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SlightlySarcastic This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 7:59 pm:
I love this. I would walk around saying lines from it all day if it wouldn't sound weird in school. Keep up the good work!
 
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sumthingprecious said...
Jan. 15, 2010 at 6:01 pm:
Wow, this is really good. I love the detail in this. You’re a great writer. You should really check out some of my writing I think you will like it. Our writing is similar in a way. Please comment and rate too. Thank you.
 
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Brea said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 7:12 pm:
Incredible piece! I truly enjoyed reading it.
 
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dadysgirl1516 said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 12:56 pm:
This poem is awesome, and very inspiring. It makes me want to keep writing so i can be as good as you. And congrats on getting it published :D
 
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Duckie430This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 12:17 pm:
this is one of the most creative & original poems that i have read in a long time. congratulations on getting published, you really deserve it. this poem is absolutely amazing, very interesting & thought-provoking
 
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poeticstarlet94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 10:41 am:
This poem was ahhhmazing.♥ Wonderfully written and I wonder at the end if "Carolyn said she believed in angels..." means she dies?? ;]
Superb!
 
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sdkkashg7 said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 10:08 am:
Thats some real deep thinking
 
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yung said...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 7:48 am:
the story is very interesting, i really liked it.
 
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scarlettrose15 said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 5:13 pm:
this is sad but its a really good poem
 
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acousticalex This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 8, 2010 at 8:29 pm:
I think the repetitive last line takes away from the whole of the poem but other than that it's relatively great! I will be adding this as my first favorite.
 
SportyZo77 replied...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 5:25 pm :
I have to disagree, the repetitive last line deffinitley contributes to the poem in an excellent way.
 
acousticalex This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 14, 2010 at 6:07 pm :
It's all just personal preference I guess, like most things. I've never been a fan of the "have a formula for the last lines of the stanzas" or "repeat something from the beginning at the end" techniques but as I said the overall poem is powerful. Seems to categorize itself unfairly in the formulaic with the repetition.
 
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mellow_melon This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 2, 2010 at 4:04 pm:
i know its the third time ive commented on this poem but i keep rereading it and i think of more things to say. my favorite part is "because i really see her and i know she believes in the afterlife but she doesnt believe in laughter" soooo good
 
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