thanks as always targon :)

yup this one is good. i like it:P

Hmm. Taking a second look, i think only the second my should have been moved. Its because down here the line *below* the parentisis starts with my, so its almost like "what will you trade my () my pennies and nickles for I wonder.?" It has two mys. Sorry! But no, i actually enjoyed this one immensly. I havent read very many of your works yet, but most of the ones ive read so far are haikus. I love haikus, but they really only have room for one thought, one idea. I like longer poems most often, even when they do only have one idea, they are capable of making that idea very, very deep. Or interesting, or humourously complex. I like this one, and gave it five stars. Odd as it is, i think it put something back into context. Often poetry depicting th bhomeless shows them as wither untrustworthy or piteous. But even though there is a *small* smattering ot that there, most of what I got outta this was the homless person's desperation, and their graditude.

Thanks for your insights into my poem. I agree it isn't one of my best. Also, you're right about the "mys"

In both cases, I might have moved "my" down a line, and had it start off the line inside the parentisies. But this is awesome. I love this thought! It interesting, and a little demented. I dont know, i think it kind of reminds of smeagols mad love for his "precious", but its an off kilter graditude instead of off kilter greed. I Liked the second and the last stanzas alot, but the last one was best. Great work!