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Over Slept

Today I awoke at 8:08,
I hopped out of bed,
I was running late,
I pulled on a T-shirt, shorts, and a sock,
And ran down stairs to look at the clock.

It is now 8:10and I am almost ready,
To run to the bus, quick and steady,
I grabbed my backpack and almost forgot,
To grab a book I liked a lot.

I run to the bus, and on my way,
I realized that today is Saturday.



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compassion said...
Oct. 16, 2012 at 5:33 am
Thats so funny!!!  and your writing is very good, keep it up .  
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Oct. 17, 2012 at 6:40 pm
Thank you very much!
 
Aegis said...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 1:53 pm
You've found youself a fan. I had just read your "Wonders of Me" and figured I had to read more.

Glad I did.
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Oct. 15, 2012 at 4:27 pm
Thank you sooo much! I will try to write more! I am really glad you read more of my peoms, it mean alot to me!
 
skullcc123 said...
Oct. 5, 2012 at 9:13 pm
wow all the lines really fit together! I love it!
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Oct. 9, 2012 at 5:38 pm
Thanks! 
 
TheGirlWhoGivesAdvice said...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 9:31 pm
lol another clever one and i hate it when i do that!!! this is very good!!
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Oct. 9, 2012 at 5:39 pm
I hate it also! Its like you wake up and think it's a school day, and then you find out you just wasted the time you had to sleep in! Thanks!
 
Aaroshi said...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 5:34 pm
Short, sweet, and rhythmic. I liked it :)
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 8:11 pm
Thanks you so much!
 
TraceSinAndBones This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 3:26 pm
I love how the last line tricks you. It leads up to something unexpected, and I like that. Some lines could use some work, though. The line "To grab my book I liked a lot" Seems really forced, and should be either cut or replaced. This whole poem seems like it could use flushing out, actually. But all in all, it's a great starter poem. Good job.
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 3:33 pm
Thanks! Would you like to be my editor? lol
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 3:33 pm
Thanks! Would you like to be my editor? lol
 
bagley777 said...
Sept. 23, 2012 at 5:59 pm
hahah, love the last line(: I wasn't expecting it!
 
OWLSLOVESIX replied...
Sept. 24, 2012 at 2:54 pm
Thanks! I was basing it on a Shel silverstine poem that I had read. It was about a kid who makes up a whole load of exscuses why he can't go to school. then his mother tells him it's Saturday! :) Thakns for rating an commenting! Please share with all your friends!
 
OWLSLOVESIX said...
Sept. 13, 2012 at 3:49 pm
Please give me helpful advice to make my poems better! I would really apreciated it!
 
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