This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.thats cute. its true about whats going on in the world
I like this a LOT. Especially the part that says: One nation, under whatever deity you choose.
I'm agnostic and I used to be atheist so this is SO right. I hate that we have to say "Under God".
The last line made me laugh out loud.
Very nice job.
I do like this a lot, because I am really into controversial things. But because of that, I have to say I disagree with what you're truly saying. Love the way that it's said and you have talent, but this is America, and being that we have freedom here, anybody here to doesn't like it is more than welcome to leave.
I agree with Sarah B. Talented, very outspoken. But maybe choose something else that isn't our pledge to America to be opininated about.
Very True, and good job, your poem is very well written.
I think the same thing!!! Except the only thing i would add, is why do we pledge to a FLAG?! I mean it is symbolic i guess, but, i mean a bald eagle could work. just why a FLAG?
It was very clever I enjoyed it. As a person who says the pledge but omits "Under God", being atheist, I felt it adressed underlieing issues that many people ignore concerning our society and culture. for a country with separation of church and state, it's very hypocritical.
haha great poem. dont be afraid to add some more cynicism
I mean pledge, not anthem. Sorry.
The more I think about this piece, the more I see the reality in it. Sorry if I offend any hard-cored patriots, but I am an open minded liberal who is not afraid to question the effectiveness of the ethics and morals our nation preaches and spoon-feeds every child. Every day we recite the pledge in school, and while the other students drone the chant we all know, I whisper this pledge instead.
Very true. We as a nation are very self centered. We blow our accomplishments way out of porportion, and love to toot our own horn. It is very creative to give this country a reality chack by using the national anthem.
Omy gosh, I don't argree with it but i do like it
somewhat.
very funny but has alot of history behind it lol. it`s giving people independence and the right to choose something that our country didnt have a once upon a time ago
THAT WAS AMAZING!!!! I LOVE THE LAST LINE. i lived in a poor neighborhood when i was younger and saw alot of people go to jail but they couldnt afford a decent lawyer to plead their case efficently. im just glad someone else took notice.
I really liked what you wrote. It really got me thinking about our culture and society today.
That was interesting. I myself used to not say the Pledge of Allegiance, I was against the word God. Then, i slowly realized that I was allowed to decide what the Pledge meant to me, and that no matter what other people thought it said, I was the one it mattered for. I like hearing your opinion of what the Pledge and the flag, and America means to you.
Your poem was funny, but after thinking about it, I was a little offended. . . Nothing in this world is going to be perfect. But what's even more sad than that is people who can't deal with that fact. Many people sacrificed their lives for this country. It's ignorant to make fun of what they died for.
I really like this poem:) It's true this county isn't as perfect as everyone is lead to believe.Just watch the news.Even our leaders are making alot of mistakes, but I have to say that it is better than some other counties.
I really dig this, so true. And I like your name, I have the same one :]
Ha! I myself refuse to say the pledge. Not because of religious purposes like many reading this are going to jump to believe (And no, I'm not religious either way.) but because I was taught to say it as a requirement. Never once did I learn it's meaning and that's really what it's all about to me.
At my school we're supposed to say it every Monday and what gets me off is that my 1st hour teacher gets so angry when people don't rise to say the pledge. Why should we stand ... (more »)
Christianity is based on "setting the captives free..." freedom.....ring a bell? Think for yourselves, not what the media dictates. Love you all.
That was sooo funny. I loved it! But America is a beautiful and so are most of the people in it. You are supposed to defend our country and if you don't like it I suggest you to get LOST!!!
Look, AMERICA is NOT perfect because PEOPLE are NOT perfect. Although it's my opinion that your poem was insulting to everyone who does believe in the pledge, I will stand behind your freedom of speech because that is one of the rights that makes America so great.It's no secret that there are some corrupt people in power, the only way to bring about positive change is to be informed about our government and to set good examples that will truly make a difference in this world. As to everyone else... (more »)
I have read the Constitution and found it is based on freedom, not Christianity.
I wish people would open their minds, and learn how to spell correctly before attempting to prove a point.
P.S. This is is great :D
I've gotten my entire class to say this every morning when we're supposed to say the original. It's insanely awesome.
i don't see what the deal is with the word god in the pledge. wasn't this country based on christanty... read the constatution.
this is all true!! it was halarious!! i agree that this should be our pledge!!
that was funny, uniqe, and funny it is double rofl
im sorry but i think that the pledge should stay the way it was written first!!
As the author, I agree. It's for a new perspective is all
this was hilariuos. i wish that we could say this pledge in school, but i noe that its not ALLOWED!!!!
I absolutely love this poem!I think anyone who doesn't like this poem is in denial. It's unique, and kinda funny. Way to tell it like it is:)
wow. this is really good. i thought it was kind of funny too. its true with how we can have liberty and justice, as long as we have a GOOD lawyer. and same with the entitey thing. i totally get it.
true this plege should be our us pledge, i think you is talented!
Look, man, all you critiziing the authour I think you should know. I don't think she was attacking AMERICA the nation, but pointing out the injustices and the bad things because we can't fix things we don't realize.
This is very well written, sharply satirical and it makes its point well. That being said, its point is completely and utterly off base.
The United States is the greatest country in the world. This can not be better evidenced by the fact that we, as a people, freely elected a racial minority for the first in time, in any country, in the history of the world.
I challenge you to find an exception.
????? Move to Canada??? ????? I mean really...good luck with Obama
This was a great satire, and quite true, really. I'd rather memorize this rather than say the traditional pledge.
I think that this is very impowering and i love it.
It speaks allot about what are "freedom" is coming to. .
Amazing:)
wee all feel the same way,
The whole thing rings true. Many of the comments say it is downturn to what this country stands for. No, in fact, it's just a play on words that are true. Remember about the controversy if God should be mentioned in the Pledge, especially at school? Well, then, maybe you will change your mind. Not to mention, it is also true that if you don't have any money, you sure don't have a good lawyer, and you might as well be the scum of the earth, and be thrown into jail even though you didn't do anythi... (more »)
i think the old one makes no sence really. I agree with babybluequeen. If this word was so perfect like she said then why is the war still goin,kids starving,losing there homes,an innocent people dying.
I really like the satirical aspect, although I must admit that I don't know if I agree with the message.
I disagree with emalicious101. This country isn't totally based on equality. If it was, then why are there still children starving every night in our country? If it's so great, then why are there people getting their homes taken away from them that they lived in for years? Our country's the best? Then why are we involved in wars that we don't belong in? Why can't everyone have equal healthcare? Don't we all want to live? Why is it that the test scores in America are lower than most of the countr... (more »)
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