This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.I really enjoyed this poem. It's the sad truth.
nice!! i liked it... or rather reallly really liked it!!!
This is probably the best poem I've seen on this site so far. The setup and wording is well done. Keep up the good work. Keep opening eyes and telling truths.
haha....this poem is becoming very controversial... :)
This is soo good! I love how you made it funnny but also got your point across! Keep up the good work! Oh, and I have a question for anyone who has been on here very long... HOw long did it take for them to approve your work when you first started?
it takes about 10-14 days for mine and maybe you could check mine out
omg i love it it is soooo funny and ironicly true haha keep up the good work :)
i totally agree Jesus what has the world come to?!?! great job keep writin
I liked this, I agree with you. Keep up the writing (:
I also do not believe that this poem is attacking America... I think it is meant to show that we each have (or at least ought to have) our own view of what this country stands for. I, too have things that make me crazy about what goes on in our country (ex. our legal system and its inefficiency, as stated by this poem); but there are also things I love (ex. our 'controversial culture') I think that these are the things that make our country unique and that this issue has no bearing on ... (more »)
Amen. I'm right with you on that.
How about the Star Spangled Banner?
I don't feel this poem is right. Its disrespectful to those who fought for this country and who helped make this country a place to have freedom of speech. This country will NEVER be perfect no one/place ever will be. That's how we were made, with a choice. people make a choice to sin and that's why the world is so messed up. its good but sadly false.
I think you speak your mind. I respect that. I do agree. Our country is 'free' but you've got a point with that last line. A lot of Americans can't afford lawyers so many get in trouble for something they didn't do. Right on: Keep your opinion strong :)
lol thats funny! :)
i like it! its completely true
its truly sad and disgusting what has become of humans in this society which we are solely responsible for crafting. the fine art of corruption seems to of become a forte. what a screwed up cultural system this has become...but hey: there are worse. thats another truth. and its because of that that this nation can still be considered great.
how low man has fallen, how low he continues to descend.
thats cute. its true about whats going on in the world
I like this a LOT. Especially the part that says: One nation, under whatever deity you choose.
I'm agnostic and I used to be atheist so this is SO right. I hate that we have to say "Under God".
The last line made me laugh out loud.
Very nice job.
I do like this a lot, because I am really into controversial things. But because of that, I have to say I disagree with what you're truly saying. Love the way that it's said and you have talent, but this is America, and being that we have freedom here, anybody here to doesn't like it is more than welcome to leave.
I agree with Sarah B. Talented, very outspoken. But maybe choose something else that isn't our pledge to America to be opininated about.
No offense, but if we cannot be opinionated about our pledge, and by extention, what we believe is right and wrong about our country, then what exactly may we be opinionated about?
P.S. I can definitely see where you're coming from, and how you could come to that conclusion, I just disagree
Very True, and good job, your poem is very well written.
I think the same thing!!! Except the only thing i would add, is why do we pledge to a FLAG?! I mean it is symbolic i guess, but, i mean a bald eagle could work. just why a FLAG?
It was very clever I enjoyed it. As a person who says the pledge but omits "Under God", being atheist, I felt it adressed underlieing issues that many people ignore concerning our society and culture. for a country with separation of church and state, it's very hypocritical.
haha great poem. dont be afraid to add some more cynicism
I mean pledge, not anthem. Sorry.
The more I think about this piece, the more I see the reality in it. Sorry if I offend any hard-cored patriots, but I am an open minded liberal who is not afraid to question the effectiveness of the ethics and morals our nation preaches and spoon-feeds every child. Every day we recite the pledge in school, and while the other students drone the chant we all know, I whisper this pledge instead.
Very true. We as a nation are very self centered. We blow our accomplishments way out of porportion, and love to toot our own horn. It is very creative to give this country a reality chack by using the national anthem.
Omy gosh, I don't argree with it but i do like it
somewhat.
very funny but has alot of history behind it lol. it`s giving people independence and the right to choose something that our country didnt have a once upon a time ago
THAT WAS AMAZING!!!! I LOVE THE LAST LINE. i lived in a poor neighborhood when i was younger and saw alot of people go to jail but they couldnt afford a decent lawyer to plead their case efficently. im just glad someone else took notice.
I really liked what you wrote. It really got me thinking about our culture and society today.
That was interesting. I myself used to not say the Pledge of Allegiance, I was against the word God. Then, i slowly realized that I was allowed to decide what the Pledge meant to me, and that no matter what other people thought it said, I was the one it mattered for. I like hearing your opinion of what the Pledge and the flag, and America means to you.
Your poem was funny, but after thinking about it, I was a little offended. . . Nothing in this world is going to be perfect. But what's even more sad than that is people who can't deal with that fact. Many people sacrificed their lives for this country. It's ignorant to make fun of what they died for.
I really like this poem:) It's true this county isn't as perfect as everyone is lead to believe.Just watch the news.Even our leaders are making alot of mistakes, but I have to say that it is better than some other counties.
I really dig this, so true. And I like your name, I have the same one :]
Ha! I myself refuse to say the pledge. Not because of religious purposes like many reading this are going to jump to believe (And no, I'm not religious either way.) but because I was taught to say it as a requirement. Never once did I learn it's meaning and that's really what it's all about to me.
At my school we're supposed to say it every Monday and what gets me off is that my 1st hour teacher gets so angry when people don't rise to say the pledge. Why should we stand ... (more »)
Christianity is based on "setting the captives free..." freedom.....ring a bell? Think for yourselves, not what the media dictates. Love you all.
That was sooo funny. I loved it! But America is a beautiful and so are most of the people in it. You are supposed to defend our country and if you don't like it I suggest you to get LOST!!!
Look, AMERICA is NOT perfect because PEOPLE are NOT perfect. Although it's my opinion that your poem was insulting to everyone who does believe in the pledge, I will stand behind your freedom of speech because that is one of the rights that makes America so great.It's no secret that there are some corrupt people in power, the only way to bring about positive change is to be informed about our government and to set good examples that will truly make a difference in this world. As to everyone else... (more »)
I have read the Constitution and found it is based on freedom, not Christianity.
I wish people would open their minds, and learn how to spell correctly before attempting to prove a point.
P.S. This is is great :D
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