A Recited Truth

laurensoccer said...
Jan. 27 at 9:38 pm:

I love this poem!!!! I appreciate your point of view and simple, but amazing writing! Keep writing!!!!! Great job!!!!!

 

gleek1234 said...
Jan. 6 at 11:55 am:

this is great

 

Mikilane said...
Oct. 31, 2011 at 4:44 pm:

 Because it's true, it's awesome.

 

Ktaylorxo said...
Sept. 17, 2011 at 2:40 pm:

love this! it's so true.

 

jaylw said...
Aug. 7, 2011 at 6:09 pm:

the sad part is its true good job

 

Inspired_By_Nothing said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 3:46 pm:

Its so true its sad. Great job.

 

xximjustmexx said...
Aug. 4, 2011 at 6:11 pm:

God. This is now on the list of my top ten favorite peoms. 5/5

 

Valkeryie said...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 6:21 pm:

This should be sent to the Times or something!  :D

 

Valkeryie said...
Jun. 24, 2011 at 6:19 pm:

This is so true.  The Pledge is beautiful and all, but it doesn't tell evrything.  (for instance, as an atheist, it's annoying to have to include God in the pledge.  I understand we're a Christian nation, but God shouldn't be an official part of the Pledge.)

There is so much corruption in the legal system, it's not even funny.  It's really sad, actually.

That said, I do love my country.  I live for her, and I die for her. ... (more »)

 

LouieHan replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 2:02 am :

How sweet a conservative American nationalist. I hope you realize the author is making fun of the United States Mr. Valkyrie.  Your comment both demeans as well as supports this poem. Maybe in a while you will discover which side you take.  By the way, I believe it is spelled Valkyrie not Valkeryie. 

 

Valkeryie replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 12:03 pm :

It's true that this poem make fun of the U.S.  And so do I.  I love my country, but satire reminds us of the things that are wrong with the system.

 

I know my side:  I love America, but there are things wrong with her system.  I support my country, and I support those who see the flaws and bring them to light. 

 

I know it's spelled wrong.  It's a "thing"  I have another account under the name "Valkerie."  :)

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crazychick said...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 5:09 pm:

haha so truee!!

 

GeekyChic said...
Jun. 13, 2011 at 5:34 pm:

You got it! love this:)

 

flamingochick0220 said...
Jun. 1, 2011 at 12:26 pm:

This is the best piece of writing I have ever read on here!  Congratulations on being so amazing!!  :))  :))

 

GothChik95 said...
May 31, 2011 at 5:21 pm:

this is kicka**!! speak the truth!!

 

kenzie011 said...
Apr. 16, 2011 at 1:35 pm:

What you have written makes perfect sense, and it speaks the truth. Good work!

 

mattroy said...
Apr. 10, 2011 at 3:03 pm:

i ts awesome

 

msoccerm345 said...
Mar. 26, 2011 at 12:05 pm:

this is so true. i am so tired of all the unfairness of this country

 

iamAbel said...
Mar. 3, 2011 at 4:11 pm:

Brilliant and creative; five stars. :)

 

strongernow said...
Mar. 3, 2011 at 9:25 am:

YES!!!! i love it, because its so true. its nice to know that someone has the same opinion as me. great work!!

 

AYO_itsdeja said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 2:45 pm:

I like . It made me giggle . It had much truth . Nice job :)

 

emoducks said...
Feb. 10, 2011 at 7:19 am:

haha :) thanks for giving me a laugh :) that was a good way to start the day :)

 

I really like the cynical value of this poem. The Pledge is so outdated and untrue. I agree completely with every line of this poem

 

Mockingbird361 said...
Jan. 18, 2011 at 5:42 pm:

Wow! Cool! I love this. I've always sort of wondered about those parts of the pledge... thanks for giving me a good laugh!;)

 

trblue said...
Dec. 27, 2010 at 9:52 pm:

i love how their a new twist on what we all know.

 

I don't know if it was supposed to but the last line made me laugh...haha :)

I personally don't often say the end of the pledge of allegience [with liberty and justice for all] because in my mind, there really isn't liberty and justice for all, which was accurately portrayed in your poem.  Just thought I'd share my views on that.

 

OriginalCarbonation said...
Dec. 25, 2010 at 9:50 pm:

ummm.... i like the idea behind this, but it seems rather sarcastic and not at all poetic. especially since there are only a few words you actually wrote in... hmm... maybe put one more lengthen it with another stanza of your own creation?

 

twilightfan101 said...
Dec. 12, 2010 at 9:41 am:

This is truly brilliant!!!!! Great Job.

 

DayDreamWriter said...
Nov. 13, 2010 at 8:52 pm:

Honestly brilliant. It shows what's wrong with society today

 

This is fantastic. Truly brilliant. Bravo.

 

Love_Me_Not said...
Oct. 29, 2010 at 8:40 am:

I think this is amazing :)  I hope you keep it up.

 

LoveSickenedRebel said...
Oct. 22, 2010 at 10:07 am:

This was awesome and true. Good job.

 

Desaree H. said...
Sept. 30, 2010 at 7:26 am:

awesome I love it!

 

pinkypromise23 said...
Sept. 8, 2010 at 8:26 pm:

the last line made me laugh(: five stars(:

 

blazin replied...
Sept. 9, 2010 at 11:44 am :

it mage me laugh to :,

 

mego95 said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 6:42 pm:

This is a great way of showing the way America really is. I love it :)

 

Baller22 said...
Aug. 18, 2010 at 7:04 pm:

check out my poems! please!

 

Shelly-T said...
Aug. 14, 2010 at 8:32 am:

This is nice, it shows the other side of America, without being disrespectful or anything.  It's great! 

 

book-keeper26 said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 7:28 pm:

if you were mocking the downward spiral into which our once great nation is falling... i loved it! but if you were serious... i think i want to go pray to God on your behalf... and cry.

 

Shadow913 said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 4:01 pm:

Haha, this is great. It perfectly portrays the negative side of America that most people seem to overlook. It was very funny, too, even if that wasn't your original intention. Good work(:

 

RonCame1993 said...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 3:40 pm:

Wow, this is good. It really captured what happens in America. Maybe you weren't trying to make it funny, but I thought it was.

 

Sania said...
Jul. 18, 2010 at 4:53 pm:

and the life of every american was told XD

 

alicial said...
Jul. 6, 2010 at 3:26 pm:

awesome =D

 

Jellybean9898 said...
Jul. 5, 2010 at 7:47 pm:

haha so true!  loved it :)

 

natasha914 said...
May 21, 2010 at 9:34 pm:

I agree! I'm going to also!

 

Dreamer_of_Dreams said...
May 21, 2010 at 12:48 pm:

We should be friends.  Call me Phillip.

 

Ahaha. Starting Monday, I'm going to start saying this XD

 

princessness_16 said...
Apr. 26, 2010 at 7:30 am:

amazing, i love it. :) so, so true.

 

krazeecasey13 said...
Apr. 25, 2010 at 6:53 pm:

hahaha i love this but its so true like i dont recite the pledge at school because i dont believe that we have liberty and justice for all and like seriously if they yell at me for it i have such good arguments that they gave up

 

Regisky10 said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 3:56 pm:

A lot of poems here are repetitive, but yours is fresh and witty so I just had to comment. Nice job!