Excuse Me.....

May 9, 2012
By DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
DanielM SILVER, Kent, Washington
6 articles 1 photo 247 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I would rather hated million times for what i did then loved a million times for what i didn't do." - Daniel Moto
" I've sought out to be the best i could posibly be but when i hit a roadblock in life what did i do, i had two choices either stay at the roadblock or i take this roadblock and make of it and go around it and achieve my goal. So, what will it be?"- Daniel Mathia

"People take love like its a four letter word or just a phrase that you tell people or your friends all the time. But in reality love is much bigger than a merely phrase or 4 letter word. Instead love is a genuine promise or covenant to that special person."-Daniel Mathia

“Why change yourself when you were made perfect and wonderfully by the creator of everything?” – Daniel Mathia

“If live is not hurtin then were really not living in.” – B. Reith


Excuse me
I’ve got something to say
And when I’m done
I Promise you
You’ll be happy that you stayed

This is just a little something
I wrote only for you
And we’ve been friends for so long now
It’s time that I tell you this

Before I’ll even tell you this
It’ll be over, said and done
So why don’t we seize the moment; freeze it and own it.
Why don’t we begin?


The author's comments:
Uh, i'm not really into writing poems but i decided to try something new so here's my first poem that i've ever written.

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on May. 18 2014 at 5:19 pm
Bronwyn-Sophronia-Atlet ELITE, Dardenne Prairie, Missouri
316 articles 10 photos 1159 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To these the past hath its phantoms,
More real than solid earth;
And to these death does not mean decay,
But only another birth"
- Isabella Banks

Amazing 1St poem! CX

on Apr. 24 2014 at 10:35 am
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
72 articles 0 photos 860 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

That's a really good start for a first poem. I can tell you're an advanced writer. I like your diction a lot; it made the character of the poem. Nice job. That's impressive for a first try!

on Oct. 21 2012 at 1:50 am
AlaskaGirl GOLD, Klawock, Alaska
11 articles 4 photos 147 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Screw the shining armor. I will take my man in dirty camo any day"

I love it! It is an amazing 1st poem! Good job :D

. said...
on Oct. 6 2012 at 8:11 pm
^That's me. Mind checking out my work?:)  

on Aug. 29 2012 at 9:32 pm
curlygurlray GOLD, Visalia, California
18 articles 1 photo 37 comments

Favorite Quote:
you have the life you let yourself take.

great job twin!(:  

on Aug. 17 2012 at 4:41 am
NitashaS SILVER, Queens Village, New York
9 articles 3 photos 12 comments
For a first poem it's got a lot going for it! It may be short which disappoints me a bit because you had many opening for expansion, a few more stanzas, etc. But I like the idea of having to tell someone something, a sort of long-overdue confession. And the last stanza about freezing time and beginning made the poem stand out in my eyes because it made you wonder, what was it you wanted to say and why savor the moment? Sounded a little lovey-dovey to me but that's just my guess ;) Keep writing! 

on Aug. 7 2012 at 7:07 pm
TheGirlWhoAteTheWorld BRONZE, Newport, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
Sm:)e

Awesome job for your first poem! I hope you post more! :)

on Jul. 30 2012 at 4:35 am
thatunknownthing DIAMOND, Dubai, Other
67 articles 0 photos 211 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, but today is a gift; that's why they call it the present"

i read the poem two times over, and got a little dissapointed there was nothing you said at all :P but the poem's good, and simple enough, nice effort for the first, though the last line, "why dont we begin?" felt a bit vague. but keep writing!

.king. SILVER said...
on Jul. 28 2012 at 8:14 am
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 573 comments

Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

Excellent, For a very first poem!

on Jul. 28 2012 at 2:21 am
StayClassy1 SILVER, Stockton, California
5 articles 1 photo 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Buy me food so i know it's real"

I love this.... <3

Hannabug GOLD said...
on Jul. 26 2012 at 7:28 pm
Hannabug GOLD, Winona, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 141 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't only practice your art, but force your way into its secrets, for it and knowledge can raise men to the Divine." Ludwig van Beethoven

This is a good poem!! U should write more :)

so_joy SILVER said...
on Jul. 26 2012 at 5:25 pm
so_joy SILVER, Navesink, New Jersey
8 articles 0 photos 724 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be the change you want to see."

Great job! Good picture choice, too.

Check out my work!


on Jul. 24 2012 at 10:21 pm
KristySparklez BRONZE, Sterling, Colorado
2 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
Time only numbs all pain, it does not heal the wounds created by, nor does it heal the pain

this is really great! keep writing!

Rain. SILVER said...
on Jul. 23 2012 at 11:08 am
Rain. SILVER, Beechhurst, New York
7 articles 0 photos 64 comments

Favorite Quote:
No matter how high you are, you always have to come back down.

Beautiful job, never stop writing!

on Jul. 22 2012 at 10:49 am
albinotiger GOLD, Gloucester, Massachusetts
13 articles 0 photos 187 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Monsters are real, and ghosts are real too. They live inside us, and sometimes, they win"- Stephen King
“In life, unlike chess, the game continues after checkmate”- Isaac Asimov

Keep on writing you r doing great! (maybe check out my work sometime)

on Jul. 16 2012 at 10:29 am
lipglosser PLATINUM, Merrimack, New Hampshire
22 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Your pain is the breaking of the shell that encloses your understanding." -Khalil Gibran

Good poem! Keep writing, I bet you could make a career out of it :)

on Jul. 16 2012 at 9:51 am
mynameisobel PLATINUM, Collingswood, New Jersey
27 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
You can not be brave if only good things have happened to you.

This is great for your fist poem!

 

 


on Jul. 16 2012 at 9:40 am
aislingob BRONZE, St. Louis, Missouri
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love as long as you live, and laugh as much as you breathe."

This is great for your first poem, short but sweet. I think you could do really well if you kept writing more, I mean this poem already is very good! 

on Jul. 12 2012 at 7:51 am
hippiechick99 GOLD, Mesquite, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 224 comments

Favorite Quote:
"... How dreary to be somebody-- How public like a frog;
To tell one's name; the livelong June-- To an admiring bog"
-Emily Dickinson

I think it's a really good poem, especially since it was your first one. I'd be glad to read more of your poems if they're ever written lol. Keep writing :))))))

on Jul. 10 2012 at 9:04 am
Dancergirl224 GOLD, Allen, Texas
15 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
I Love You Now and Forever <3
I am always by your side.... I'm in your heart
you should be optimisticly pestimestic

Nice poem, I like it!


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