Hold a candle (darling)

March 26, 2012
By WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything comes from something."


Hold a candle to me darling,
I know what path to take
But here and now contrast to anywhere…
Feels too long a road, awake

Picture a pair of perfect fools
Know not half as much as feelings lay
While one lies in between them
The other sails from bay

Hold a candle to me darling,
Though your hand may waver dear
I don’t care ‘bout the steadfast light…
Only when it falters will I fear

If a brick is laid on another
Is not the position sound?
But lay 10 bricks along each-other
And the form of wall may round

Hold a candle to me darling,
I fear darkness as much as light
So in a world where yin deals yang away
I note that light is less than bright


The author's comments:
Just a poem that randomly spilled out of my mind.

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on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:11 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
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Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Wow, I absolutely love this! Amazing Job! For your first poem! Very creative! I give you 5 stars;) And its amazing your from Canada, I've been there before!

on Mar. 30 2012 at 8:11 am
SuNshiNe007 ELITE, Magee Ms., Mississippi
120 articles 0 photos 348 comments

Favorite Quote:
Never Give Up, And Know That God Will Always Love You!

Wow, I absolutely love this! Amazing Job! For your first poem! Very creative! I give you 5 stars;) And its amazing your from Canada, I've been there before!

on Mar. 28 2012 at 6:00 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything comes from something."

Thanks sweetheartless!

on Mar. 28 2012 at 5:47 pm
Sweetheartless GOLD, Sandston, Virginia
10 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"God is a comedian playing to an audience too afraid to laugh." -Voltaire

I like it! It's soft but the message is very clear. Very nice work.

on Mar. 27 2012 at 4:09 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything comes from something."

Thank you! You're the first person to actually welcome me!

And I swear, I didn't do any editing or reviewing whatsoever. In reality, I wrote it directly into a tumblr post a few days ago; it's not even saved onto my computer!


on Mar. 27 2012 at 4:02 pm
beautifulspirit PLATINUM, Alpharetta, Georgia
35 articles 0 photos 1401 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.
--Eleanor Roosevelt

Interesting poem! Are you sure you didn't spend a lot of time perfecting it? I especially liked the third and fifth stanzas. Great job~ Welcome to teenink!

on Mar. 27 2012 at 1:51 pm
WritingVincent SILVER, Calgary, Other
7 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything comes from something."

Thank you! And there is too a story! Just kidding, that critique is very accurate :p I found that it had meaning/metaphorical description, but yes, it randomly came out and therefor was very...random?
Thanks for the rating and review!

on Mar. 27 2012 at 12:50 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

I liked it. :) In the description, you say that this is just some random writing (which I actually do a lot of, hehe) and I could kind of see that in the poem. Not that that's a bad thing, but it was just kind of hard to find the meaning, or story, to this. 

But I honestly love your writing style, and the words you used to write this. It's not simple and plain, which I find facinating. Great job on thsi! :) Five stars!





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