Fluttering Butterflies

January 9, 2012
By weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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Enamored by fluttering butterflies
My words splinter across the floor, hollow
Desolate like my kaleidoscope eyes

He sunk his teeth into my truth and lies
Despite flaws he slept away his sorrow
Enamored by fluttering butterflies

I emptied my mind and painted blue skies
Shattered perfume, let the crystal shallow
Desolate like my kaleidoscope eyes

Yet still he lingered, wove our cobalt ties
Pain overwhelmed me, forced me to swallow
Enamored by fluttering butterflies

He stained all we knew, and hid my demise
Sucked my sorrow, shielded me from tomorrow
Desolate like my kaleidoscope eyes

He locked my emotion, muted my cries
Filled with twisted glee, I began to follow
Enamored by fluttering butterflies
Desolate like my kaleidoscope eyes

The author's comments:
I wrote this piece as an assignment for my creative writing class. Every word has a purpose and each line is symbolic of an emotion or feeling. I hope that the reader will understand what this poem "means", however I'd rather leave my intention unstated in order to leave it more open to the reader.

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on Apr. 5 2012 at 12:50 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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this poem is a villanelle and so the repitition is due to the form :) thanks

on Apr. 5 2012 at 12:47 pm
_ella_herondale BRONZE, San Diego, California
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Favorite Quote:
"...If the Thames that ran beside them...recalled a night where the moon shone as brightly as a shilling on the same boy and girl... and thought to themselves, 'at last, the wheel comes full circle,' they kept their silence."

I like the repetition and the mystery behind ur words. awesome possum poem!!

on Mar. 27 2012 at 7:51 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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hi thank you!

on Mar. 17 2012 at 1:14 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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thank you so much! and that is very nice of you to say :)

on Mar. 17 2012 at 1:13 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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awh thank you, I really appreciate it!

aerojay BRONZE said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 11:02 am
aerojay BRONZE, North Bellmore, New York
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Favorite Quote:
#haann

this is a great poem!!!

keep doing what ur doing and one day it will pay off


on Mar. 17 2012 at 1:17 am
Writer_Jordan GOLD, Ellicott City, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
All that is gold does not glitter,
Not all those who wander are lost;
The old that is strong does not wither,
Deep roots are not reached by the frost.
From the ashes a fire shall be woken,
A light from the shadows shall spring;
Renewed shall be blade that was broken,
The crownless again shall be king.

Wow, I can imagine the expression on your teacher's face. This is filled with symbolism and well-thought out comparisons. Beautiful job! I agree with readaholic, you can interpret more from the poem each time you read through!

TrishaLove said...
on Mar. 17 2012 at 12:23 am
hey....AWESOME !!!!

on Feb. 1 2012 at 6:45 am
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

You're welcome! :D

on Jan. 31 2012 at 7:47 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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thank you so much, that means a lot!

on Jan. 31 2012 at 6:55 pm
readaholic PLATINUM, Tomahawk, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
I'd rather fail because I fell on my own face than fall because someone tripped me up
~Jhonen Vasquez

Good poem. I think it could read it over again ten times and find something new each time :D

on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:27 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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thank you, you're so sweet & yes I will check it out now :)

on Jan. 30 2012 at 7:27 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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thank you so much :)

Phoenix. said...
on Jan. 29 2012 at 9:39 pm
Phoenix., Pittsfield, Pennsylvania
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i really LIKE this good job and you have great vocabulary too please check out my poem earthquake! :)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 8:33 pm
Ruthie_j BRONZE, Lilburn, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
The Church Is Not a Bless Me Club .

REALLY GOOD :)

on Jan. 29 2012 at 8:13 pm
weetzziebat BRONZE, Los Angeles, California
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thank you!

on Jan. 29 2012 at 8:09 pm
seaofsorrows GOLD, Lynnwood, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Love. A four letter word, short but true. With no hope of being defined. But what's new?



-S. Jordan

very well written, I enjoyed your word choice.


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