Our Place

December 5, 2011
By Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest


In this world we seek
Our place, purpose, value,
Which we will find one day.
Tentative and meek,
We stake our paltry claims
And whisper what we say.

We only grasp at straws,
We climb the smallest hills,
Search, but don't believe.
And though we try, we pause,
And rarely dare to hope
We're greater than perceived.

But when people find
The place that is their own,
What they were put here for,
And found their friends, their kind,
They'll take on the whole world,
Stronger than before.


The author's comments:
This work was written as a collab poem between meanangel and LoudDreamer.

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on Jun. 12 2015 at 1:10 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

@ansem_unlimited I'm not quite a teen anymore. I removed my profile because of that, and a few personal reasons. I left this one up because it was co-written with another Teen Ink Writer. Thank you, though. I"m immensely cheered that someone misses my writing!

on Jun. 12 2015 at 1:09 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
1 article 0 photos 629 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

@ansem_unlimited I'm not quite a teen anymore. I removed my profile because of that, and a few personal reasons. I left this one up because it was co-written with another Teen Ink Writer. Thank you, though. I"m immensely cheered that someone misses my writing!

on Dec. 19 2014 at 11:57 am
ansem_unlimited PLATINUM, Frederick, Maryland
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Favorite Quote:
Thou may think of me as desired, to idolize or villanize me whichever you may choose. but gaze upon me and thou sall not see the husk of a man! for all my sins and all my bliss, i am anything but hollow
-Ansem_Unlimited

I like it alot, but if you don't mind to terribly, where are your other poems! I love this one but when I went to your profile they were gone!! did something happen!=(

on Dec. 17 2014 at 4:18 pm
WindRunner GOLD, Troy, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
For those who hope in the Lord will renew their strength. They will fly on wings like eagles, they will run and not grow weary, they will walk and not be faint.

I love the poem! great topic and rhythm scheme.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 7:58 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Pardon? I didn't use any metophores in this, I know. I do sometimes, but I didn't have anything for this. What I don't understand what the phrase 'line consciously' means. Thank you for commenting and Im glad you didn't think it was too bad, but I don't get that last part.

pitt98 GOLD said...
on Dec. 12 2011 at 6:02 pm
pitt98 GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not the days in life we remember, rather the moments." 
- Walt Disney

This poem is fine. Try thinking metephorically, line consciously and kill the cliches.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 4:17 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

lol, this isn't really a subject that I would have written about on my own, I would never have come up with this promt. I think you deserve just as much credit as I do, maybe more. Plus I really feel bad I took over. You should be proud that you helped write a great poem, the most important part of it, in fact.

on Dec. 12 2011 at 2:54 pm
xXxXangelXxXx SILVER, Henderson, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
“Accept no one's definition of your life; define yourself"
" Love and Loyalty Runs Deeper Than Blood!"
"A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love, listens but doesn't believe, leaves b4 shes left."

Hey congrats That was really nice of you to mention me, but u didn't really have to. I mean, I only came up with the first couple of lines, and you worked ur magic on the rest. It is really gud though. I am proud that u got it publish!   :)


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