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She sat there
Silent.
With book in hand, she embraced the summer air.
The sounds of children playing and birds singing
All, in sweet harmony.
She looked up
Took a deep breath

Sigh.

The ice- cream man came along
Creamy delights – red, white, yellow, brown
Still as a statue, deep in thought.
She didn’t look up.

She turns the page.

A tear trickles down her cheek.
A sole tear, teetering at her chin
Plop, it falls.
She gets up
Walks away

Leaving the book on the bench.



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Dee.D said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:44 am

It's beautiful, S! Really :)

I love the way you paint a picture of the girl :)

 
Mariam.J replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:47 am

Dang, that makes me sound like some artisitc individual or something :P

Merci beaucoup, mon amie :')

 
Dee.D replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:50 am
With pleasure :)
 
Dee.D replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:52 am
I just replied on my thread! Did you see it?
 
Mariam.J replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:57 am

Yesh, yesh!

I deeeeeeed :D

 
Princess2011 said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 4:47 am
its really nice.:) the image you formed of this girl.. the children playing the ice-cream vendor the book the "tear drop"....although i didnt understand one thing , why was the girl crying? but nevertheless  i simply "love" the way youve written it!!!! beautifully framed...
 
Princess2011 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 4:49 am
''A tear trickles down her cheek.
A sole tear, teetering at her chin
Plop, it falls.'' Ironically though i love these lines..esp. the last one.. it words itself form an image infront of you without the use of a pencil or a pen!!! cool!
 
Princess2011 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 4:50 am
sorry not it its the**
 
Mariam.J replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 4:51 am

Well, I wrote it in such a way that..

I give the readers a chance to decide what they want it to be.

She could be suffering from depression, loss of a loved one, a break up.

Whatever it is, she's sad even though she's surrounded by so much colour and happiness. And maybe, one day, she'll learn to appreciate the riot of colours i.e life ( :

And thank you so much for your comment!

Dang, I feel important x) :D

 
Princess2011 replied...
Jul. 16, 2011 at 12:04 am
now thats wonderful....
 
Reader101 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 9:06 pm
i totally agree with what you just said there chicka... i LOVE this poem... new favorite... i can relate to this and i love how you pulled it together with the words and breaks... <3
 
Blackmirror said...
Jul. 14, 2011 at 10:20 pm
beautiful! :) i love it! you're amazing as ever! :)
 
Mariam.J replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 2:18 am

Awwww :')

Thank you ( :

I really WAS stuck.

Don't think it's my best poem though :/

 
Blackmirror replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 9:18 am
that's ok. it's still good. :)
 
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