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Photo credit: Kayla D., Croydon, IN
thudding with purpose
beating like a drum
through my rib cage
making my vision blur
my world is tilting
all because of three little words
“I love you.”
Focusing intently
on the simple task
of breathing
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Unfinished Love Confession 
By Emily T., Columbia, SC
thudding with purpose
beating like a drum
through my rib cage
making my vision blur
my world is tilting
all because of three little words
“I love you.”
Focusing intently
on the simple task
of breathing
This piece has also been published in Teen Ink's monthly print magazine.
a B.
<3::wish4wings::<3
this is so sweet:)
""focusing on the simple task of breathing""
i like it alot
Blossom said...
Jan. 2 at 7:14 am:
Jan. 2 at 7:14 am:
This poem is so sweet and yet funny because I can just imagine a cartoon character being in a blur with the phrsase "I love you" surrounding him/her until him/her falls from exhaustment of trying to breathe and stand all at once. Great job and write on Bubbles!
Cookiemonstar said...
Dec. 15, 2008 at 3:14 pm:
Dec. 15, 2008 at 3:14 pm:
This poem is good granted. It reprents those sweet little feelings we all desire. But is it really love? Love comes day by day, you can never know if it is true. You can't know if their love is the same as yours, so as your heart thumps and you are short of breath remember not to put too much hope on those 3 little words... becayse they might not be true.
Mr said...
Nov. 26, 2008 at 7:11 pm:
Nov. 26, 2008 at 7:11 pm:
I really love this! it reminds me of how i felt when my boo said those three words to me.
miriana1 said...
Nov. 20, 2008 at 3:38 am:
Nov. 20, 2008 at 3:38 am:
this piece is absolutely amazing lovely job!
Poewannabe said...
Nov. 20, 2008 at 12:09 am:
Nov. 20, 2008 at 12:09 am:
i really loved it i actually that feeling not to long ago and could not figure out how to word it so thanx
kdhg said...
Nov. 19, 2008 at 6:41 pm:
Nov. 19, 2008 at 6:41 pm:
its not very good, im sorry, but its really bad.
Dani** said...
Oct. 2, 2008 at 12:43 am:
Oct. 2, 2008 at 12:43 am:
i really love this poem it reminds me of a past relationship....
GOOD JOB!!!
littlemelover said...
Sept. 17, 2008 at 5:38 pm:
Sept. 17, 2008 at 5:38 pm:
i am totally speechless i was the same way i love it!!!
Brandy_XoxO said...
Sept. 19, 2008 at 5:30 pm:
Sept. 19, 2008 at 5:30 pm:
I love it! especially the last part its really cute<3
<3myluvsong182 said...
Sept. 14, 2008 at 4:46 pm:
Sept. 14, 2008 at 4:46 pm:
omg, totally speechless...maximum awesomness!!! I'm
JamezRulz813 said...
Sept. 3, 2008 at 12:13 am:
Sept. 3, 2008 at 12:13 am:
Wow. That was really well written. Keep writing it makes life worth living
quilty of confessions said...
Aug. 26, 2008 at 7:31 pm:
Aug. 26, 2008 at 7:31 pm:
That was really good. Like, I've been trying to say that for a really long time, but I couldn't find the words to do so. Thank you for showing me the words.
neslyn08 said...
Aug. 13, 2008 at 8:09 pm:
Aug. 13, 2008 at 8:09 pm:
thats really cute.
short.sweet. to the point.Good Job.
isaly44 said...
Aug. 9, 2008 at 4:04 am:
Aug. 9, 2008 at 4:04 am:
i loved it...u described exactly what ive been trying to put into words but couldnt seen to get it to come out right
Michael the Mentalist said...
Aug. 6, 2008 at 5:42 am:
Aug. 6, 2008 at 5:42 am:
*sparse applause from the crowd* pretty good you could work on your rhythm a little bit though. In other words the gradation of syllables is to abrupt but all in all not bad
courtneexox said...
Aug. 5, 2008 at 11:15 pm:
Aug. 5, 2008 at 11:15 pm:
I no how this feels and u describe it soooo well!
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