Breakup

June 11, 2010
By Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

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A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise


Burning fire runs through my being
darkness grips my consciousness
of all the things I used to be
silence and sorrow's all that's left.

Chocolate curls and grass green eyes
now tauntingly wrapped in lies
If only now I could forget
the burning love that died.


The author's comments:
This is inspired by the book i am writing.

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on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:51 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Definitely... none of the fluffly comments. Just tell it like it is please... Thanks!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:50 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

Of course I can!! and i will try and give you honest feedback if thats what you want!!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:49 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Hey I'm not trying to say that I just wrote all these comments for payback, BUT if you ever have the chance I would really appreciate it if you could read some of my stuff. :)

 


on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:48 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

Okay i was a little confused!! :)

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:47 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
16 articles 9 photos 302 comments

Favorite Quote:
A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

thanks its not the longest and most heart wrenching piece or anything i just wrote it for fun!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:46 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

I mean I'm NOT just saying that

 


on Jul. 27 2010 at 2:46 pm
sleeplessdreamer PLATINUM, Raleigh, North Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"I have always wanted to write in such a way that people say, 'I have always thought that but never found the words for it.'" -anonymous

Good again!! This is really cool. I love the last stanza... and I'm just saying that... haha ;)

 


on Jul. 21 2010 at 6:54 pm
Inherinerd GOLD, Ashland, Ohio
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A word to the wise ain't nessecary it's the stupid ones that need the advise

Cool!! and thank you!! I really like to write poetry although i'm not the best at it!! :)

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on Jul. 21 2010 at 6:34 pm
ELM522 DIAMOND, Selden, New York
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"All those other girls, well they're beautiful, but would they write a song for you?"-"Hey Stephen" by Taylor Swift

This is beautiful!!! I love poetry, and I am part of my school's literary magazine, and I have to say this is one of the best I've ever read!!! This also ties in with the saga I'm writing now!




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