Replacing You

May 27, 2010
By Winchester_Girl BRONZE, Nine Mile Falls, Washington
Winchester_Girl BRONZE, Nine Mile Falls, Washington
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we're living on borrowed time and if you don't put your heart out there on the line you're never really living at all"


I tried to replace you with ice cream
But the pain was always there
Your memory stays with me, so I block it out with a scream
But the sound of your voice still haunts me, a sound I cannot bear

I tried to replace you with books
But the words had no affect on me
I remember your old fishing box; it sits on the floor still filled with hooks
But you are no longer here to take me fishing by that old willow tree

I tried to replace you with songs
But the lyrics only brought you back
Our love and happy memories were sadly not ones to prolong
But the past cannot be changed, a power that I lack

I tried to replace you with art
But my brush kept painting your face
I wipe my hand across the wet paint, the images break my heart
But the images stay in my head, filling an empty space

I tried to replace you with baking
But the smell brought back the holidays
Without you no memories we would be making
But now there’s just this coffin, I’m full of dismay


The author's comments:
It was a fun thing started in class and I decided to take it to the next level and turn it into a serious poem

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on Jul. 16 2010 at 9:04 am
LoveMeIfYouDare BRONZE, Lafayette, Louisiana
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Favorite Quote:
"I have many injuries. It is better not to talk about them." ~ Natalia Ma

aww you didnt have to be nervous!ur an amazing writer!keep posting please!!!

on Jul. 14 2010 at 12:49 am
Winchester_Girl BRONZE, Nine Mile Falls, Washington
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we're living on borrowed time and if you don't put your heart out there on the line you're never really living at all"

thanks.  this is actually the first time that i have ever let someone read my work. i was nervous lol

on Jul. 14 2010 at 12:48 am
Winchester_Girl BRONZE, Nine Mile Falls, Washington
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we're living on borrowed time and if you don't put your heart out there on the line you're never really living at all"

thank you so much

on Jul. 14 2010 at 12:47 am
Winchester_Girl BRONZE, Nine Mile Falls, Washington
3 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we're living on borrowed time and if you don't put your heart out there on the line you're never really living at all"

of course i will

aunttee said...
on Jul. 4 2010 at 9:36 am
i loved this. you are an amazing person. brought tears to my eyes.

*lili* said...
on Jun. 27 2010 at 2:29 am
will do! thanx for replying!

on Jun. 27 2010 at 1:44 am
katielynn21 DIAMOND, Sierra Vista, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
live as if you'll die tomorrow, dream as if you'll live forever

This was amazing i really enjoyed it.

on Jun. 27 2010 at 12:32 am
*~Lynx~* SILVER, Cathedral City, California
5 articles 0 photos 18 comments

Favorite Quote:
If you love someone, let them go. If they come back to you it was meant to be.......

Beautiful absolutly beautiful... 

Check out some of my work please?


* Lili* said...
on Jun. 26 2010 at 5:55 pm
This was an excellent poem i wish i could put one together like that it has motivated me! thank you!

on Jun. 25 2010 at 9:18 pm
Sileron-evol PLATINUM, Providence, Rhode Island
44 articles 0 photos 98 comments

Favorite Quote:
"we are captives of our own identities, living in prisons of our own creation"

wow i rlly looooooooovedd this, and i could relatee as well.

one of my favorites for sure

check out my work ?


myheart BRONZE said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 7:43 pm
myheart BRONZE, Hockley, Texas
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Astounding! Brought tears to my eyes.

on Jun. 25 2010 at 11:32 am
I-Passion BRONZE, Chicago, Illinois
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont Judge by it book cover
Action Speaks louder then Words

This poems is outstanding! I love how you took it beyond the level from your class. Keep it up, you will succeed in your future.

on Jun. 24 2010 at 11:48 pm
NessieMarie GOLD, Minonk, Illinois
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i absolutly love this. its very well written and really easy to relate to. great work!

on Jun. 24 2010 at 7:26 pm
lilly_valley GOLD, Shiloh, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates...you never know what your gonna get. :)

This poem is absolutely amazing. I can totally relate to everything in this. It was so good i actually cried.

on Jun. 24 2010 at 5:22 pm
Aribear17 SILVER, Aldie, Virginia
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I am IN LOVE with this poem. It's my favorite out of every poem on this site.

Chelz PLATINUM said...
on Jun. 24 2010 at 9:14 am
Chelz PLATINUM, Iron Mountain, Michigan
23 articles 3 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life gives you lemons, bite into it and embrace the bitter taste of reality." (My own words)

This is an awesome poem, it one of the best poems I have seen! Great work




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