What No One Sees / The Other Dimension

May 27, 2010
By bblz22 PLATINUM, Owasso, Oklahoma
bblz22 PLATINUM, Owasso, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
"When you feel like giving up, remember why you held on for so long in the first place." -Anonymous


My defenses have now gone down.
Lower than the ground.

Even though they are this low,
I try not to let them show.

That I'm scared, broken, and nervous.
Because, if i do, that might cause,

People to see
A different me.

One that rarely comes out,
And one that no one really knows about.

Because, I wanna look so strong,
The one who's headstrong, and never wrong.

But now that I'm broken,
I give you this token.

That grants you permission
To see the raw and unedited version.

Of the otherside,
That has not been touched by that outside.

Or touched by the conformity,
Of this world and it's society.

8-13-9

Don't worry, nothing's wrong.
Least, that's what they say in the song.

But how do they know?
When it's covered by a show?

I'm sick of this act,
All I wanna do is go back.

To where there is no hurt, or pain,
And no personal gain.

Someplace like a new demension,
Where you don't have to ask permission,

To be yourself,
And not like everyone on the shelf.

A place with no judge,
To foce someone to budge.

Just to make them do
Something that they don't want to.

Now that we've seen this side,
Can we put the past aside?

So we can all come,
and good can be done?

8-14-9


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on Jun. 26 2010 at 11:36 am
thezebrasgray PLATINUM, Taylorsville, Utah
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this is an awesome poem!

on Jun. 25 2010 at 9:35 pm
Sileron-evol PLATINUM, Providence, Rhode Island
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Favorite Quote:
"we are captives of our own identities, living in prisons of our own creation"

wow is all i can say. i feel like this all the time, hiding the real me. please please keep writing you have a raw talent.

check out my work sumtime, please comment and some advice wouldnt hurt.

thank you


on Jun. 25 2010 at 9:21 pm
just-a-joy GOLD, Indianapolis, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
Eminem: Success is my only option, failure's not

i feel the same way a lot of time..... i like the words u used they r beautiful

jabes GOLD said...
on Jun. 25 2010 at 3:40 pm
jabes GOLD, Colorado Springs, Colorado
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I really like this. I feel i can realate a lot. this is a very sad but deep and real poem. keep writting :)




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