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An Insomniac's Night

April 19, 2010
By melodeess GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
melodeess GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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A whispering hand folds to close my eyes,
Beads of sweat tense my body, as if a surprise.
But I know this endless game.
I resist every night as I hear my name.

Quick beats resonate as my heart lies,
it's silvery song gives away its disguise.
Why do I not just proclaim,
That oh endlessly, sleep, I have lost you to the flames?

The clock waves by a hundred goodbyes,
as each second in time dies.
My journey is still long, the hours the same.
Alone, my darkness hiding strength which never came.

I wait until the glorious light comes to claim
--seeing the black fall away in shame.
Hours later, it's again a reprise,
as I try to sleep a thousand times.


The author's comments:
Not being able to sleep is like being kidnapped against your will.

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M_IML DIAMOND said...
on Apr. 28 2011 at 3:17 pm
M_IML DIAMOND, Ganei Tikva, Other
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Love it! This is great - I usually don't love poetry, especially free verse, with obvious rhyming but you made it work. I rated this four stars, because there are some lines I like less than others (i.e., loved the first verse, less "that oh endlessly, sleep, I have lost you to the flames?" because I think it doesn't flow very well with the rest of the poem). Overall, great job! :-))

melodeess GOLD said...
on May. 28 2010 at 4:04 pm
melodeess GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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thanks a lot! ill be sure to check out your work then ;) 

TheJust ELITE said...
on May. 28 2010 at 3:13 pm
TheJust ELITE, Ellenton, Florida
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I love this! I have a poem called "Insomnia" that's kinda like this! This is really good!

melodeess GOLD said...
on May. 11 2010 at 3:03 pm
melodeess GOLD, Edison, New Jersey
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Hey! If you decide to rate my article, thanks a lot! I would also love it if you posted a comment telling me why you gave the article the rating you chose. Thanks a lot :) -Melody