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Blue bottles,two blue bottles
I'm all bottled up
Blue heart, two blue hearts
I'm all in love
Blue sky, yours and mine
Two blue skies and
Flying is a white dove
Blue water, take a swim
One takes a swim when
The other can't
Blue day, cause I'm sad
Blue bottles in my hand
I'm all bottled up
Blue heart, I'm all in love
Blue sky, up above
Yours and mine my love
Blue bottles, two blue bottles
Sit in my room on the floor and
They shimmer and what more
Do I want than to not be alone
Blue bottles, two blue bottles
Just a garage sale find and
I did'nt mind
Now I look at them so truelly blue
Just like my heart is
Blue bottles, and I'm all bottled up

Blue water, I should take a swim
Blue heart, burning hot
At the thought of him
Blue water should cool me off
Once again, again
Blue water so cold and crisp
Blue sky makes up for blue wind so brisk

Blue bottles
Blue hearts
Blue life
Blue smarts
Blue sky
Blue wondering why
Blue ocean
Blue butterfly
Blue, blue
Everything is blue my darling
Life is so blue without you

I'm reaching for warmth
All I have is this blue sweater
Blue thoughts in my head
I long for when
You'll make this blueness better





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kksme This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 12, 2010 at 9:12 pm
Really good. I like how blue can be happiness and sadness in a way. 
 
HeronHero replied...
May 13, 2010 at 4:46 pm
thanks, me too!:)
 
chels19 said...
May 10, 2010 at 7:39 pm

i love this! these are my two favorite parts:


Blue heart, burning hot
At the thought of him
Blue water should cool me off
Once again, again
Blue water so cold and crisp
Blue sky makes up for blue wind so brisk


I'm reaching for warmth
All I have is this blue sweater
Blue thoughts in my head
I long for when
You'll make this blueness better

 

and i love the "I'm all bottled up"

 
HeronHero replied...
May 10, 2010 at 7:54 pm
Thanks so much!I love getting feedback for my work:)I think those are my favorite parts too! I can't wait to read some of your stuff!!!!
 
Ebony_Rose said...
May 6, 2010 at 8:12 am
I like this one too... But there was something there that was just a bit off... Idk... I'll read it again when I get home and try to figure it out... XD
 
HeronHero replied...
May 10, 2010 at 7:50 pm
Okay I'd love to hear your input, if there's anything I can do to make it better, I want to try to do it!:)
 
MayaElyashiv This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 2, 2010 at 1:28 am
I like this one too! Although it didn't make me sad, per se...more thoughtful. I think it's because of the emotional associations I have for blue and bottles...
 
HeronHero replied...
May 2, 2010 at 1:55 pm
Thanks! I'm to am pretty attached to this poem, and my blue bottles!:)haha I'm glad you like it though...... Is there anything you think I could make better, or that you did'nt like?
 
HeronHero replied...
May 2, 2010 at 1:55 pm
typo* sorry about that:)
 
MayaElyashiv This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
May 4, 2010 at 9:02 am

Hmm...I'd say the one thing that could be made better is perhaps taking away some of the lines, lines that maybe mean less to you than others, because towards the middle it starts to feel like you 'lost your way'. I mean, not lost your way forgot about what your writing, but lost your way in that it felt like too much on one topic, you know?

 

Sorry, I'm not all that good at constructive criticism... 

 
HeronHero replied...
May 10, 2010 at 7:57 pm
I kinda know what you mean....which parts are you talking about?:)
 
Lonleydandy said...
Apr. 10, 2010 at 3:37 pm
Aw, sorry about whatever happened to you!!! I did like the poem though! I also like the one called "Anima" as well. :D
 
HeronHero replied...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 1:12 pm
Thank you so much I'm glad you like it!I was pretty sad when I wrote it.I really like your stuff too:)
 
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