Two weeks

THE DISTANCE AND THE TIMING BETWEEN US IS PRETTY LONG, MUSIC IS WHAT BRINGS HAPPINESS BACK TO ME, THEREFORE EVERTIME I PLAY A DIFFERENT SONG
US BEING TOGETHER AGAIN TO ME RIGHT NWO IS A DREAM
ITS SO HARD AND COMPLICATED, BUT THATS ONLY HOW IT SEEM
EVERTHING REMINDS ME OF YOU, THE RAIN, THE CLOCK, COLDNESS, AND BURING HOT
WHEN YOU'RE NOT THERE WHEN I NEED YOU THE MOST, ITS LIKE IN THE HEART IVE BEEN SHOT
I DONT EVER WANNA BE WITHOUT YOU, DONT ASK ME WHY NOT
TELL ME YOU LOVE ME TILL I BREATH YOUR LOVE
TILL I FEEL IT THROUGH MY LUNGS
NO LONGER CAN MY WORDS EXPRESS!
IM GOING TO STOP, BUT ILL GO ON IN MY HEART
I LOVE YOU, FOREVER,
I LOVE YOU BECUASE YOURE MINE, AND IM YOURS.. TILL YOU GIVE UP.. WOULD YOU EVER?





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BurnHem said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 4:25 pm
You are remarkable. I really like this poem a lot. It's complex and figurative enough to make you reread it over and over and over again!, but somehow communicative enough to express true pure feelings coming from the heart straight to paper!
 
Shahed replied...
Nov. 23, 2010 at 4:39 pm
Aww thanks! That really means a lot to me! :) Im glad you liked it!
 
BurnHem replied...
Nov. 26, 2010 at 11:52 am

You're welcome!

You must have missed one of my comments on "He laughs when I cry and it hurts"

 
_Elsy_ said...
Jun. 22, 2010 at 2:21 pm
I love this, you are an amazing poet. btw- can you check out some of my stuff?
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 22, 2010 at 5:42 pm
Aww thanks! And I'll :)
 
_Elsy_ replied...
Jun. 22, 2010 at 6:04 pm
your welcome
 
Kbuschan said...
Jun. 21, 2010 at 8:58 am
Beautiful poemm :)
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 21, 2010 at 2:12 pm
Thank you! :)
 
Shadows said...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 8:20 am
You have beautiful poetry! Amazing! It touches my heart so deep to hear your poems. They express every feeling you can have and i know what those feelings are. Your work gives me goosebumps!! Keep going! You'll make lots of money! :))
 
Shahed replied...
Jun. 7, 2010 at 12:52 pm
I'm glad you feel my poems in a very nice way, and thanks I write becuase I like writing I express myself through it!
 
lil dolo said...
May 16, 2010 at 1:51 pm
aww..ilove this peom..good job
 
Shahed replied...
May 16, 2010 at 1:53 pm
thnxx, lil dolo ;)
 
Tiffanie_ This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2010 at 3:56 pm

Hmm this poem reminds me of a lost love. it seems like you want to be with whoever but its too far away. i like it!

 

p.s comments on my other works? haha

 
Shahed replied...
May 13, 2010 at 8:40 pm

This poem was meant for one person, and will always be! Im glad you like it!

lol Ill check out your work asap! ;)

 
noelleism said...
Mar. 3, 2010 at 9:17 am
It sounds to me like you've lost some Lover. Or love. Try not to think of love when it hurts to much, think of life and who you'll become, and who you are by your self without them.:)
 
Shahed replied...
Mar. 4, 2010 at 4:53 pm
close enough.. Ill.. thanks for the advice!
 
jephte15 said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 8:12 pm
i actually like reading you work and you know how much i hate reading lol :)
 
Shahed replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 8:14 pm
thank you! .. yea I know ;)
 
lostnhim said...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 12:02 am
Ive said it before, and i will say it again! You are an amazing writer! Your poetry touches me...You have a gift!!!!
 
Shahed replied...
Feb. 21, 2010 at 9:10 am
thank you so much!!
 
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