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Peering through the crystal glass
Viewing her only hope to let herself free
Knowing that deep down within
To her freedom would never be.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

A ray of sunshine starts to shine through
Making her feel brightness inside
But once that light fades
Her soul has once again died.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

When she gets terminally ill
Now she forced to see
How happy her life had been
And set her heart free.

"Give up, give up,"
She heard herself say
But she pushes that thought away
At the dawn of each day.
"What's the point? What's the point?"
She said her mind falling apart
Giving in to doubt and
Takes those problems straight to heart.

Now she sees the present brightly
And is thankful for each day
Praying each moment
On earth she'd still stay.

Her family and friends
Cried when she died
But frozen on her face
Was the happiness in her eyes.

The hardened heart
Had broken at just the right moment
This was always God's plan
And to heaven she was joyfully sent.



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Payton said...
Jul. 2, 2010 at 8:43 am
Wow this is really good you really captured how she felt and how she never gave up even though she wanted to.  You are an amazing writter keep it up.
 
i.ll_be_fine_899 said...
Jun. 27, 2010 at 7:39 pm
aw that was amazingly beautiul. like, i see it, she pushed herself into happiness and she kept it the rest of her life. this was awesome, good job!!
 
amicrazyorisitjusteveryoneelse said...
May 2, 2010 at 12:27 am
 I LOVE YOUR WRITING!!!!!!!!
 
--LoveHappens-- said...
Apr. 24, 2010 at 7:41 pm
I love the writing... how you repeated the one stanza but I don't understand the topic and what is happening and how the girl died but other than that it is great. I would love it if you checked out my writing as well especially the Pretty One and leave a comment thanks so much and great work!!!
 
xodistantdreamerxo said...
Mar. 15, 2010 at 3:20 pm
This is redonkulously (my own word) relatable. I know that I've gone through that type of mindset before. You captured this beautifully.
 
SeaStorm This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 5, 2010 at 1:51 pm
More beautiful than a strawberry sunset :)
A little vague, but most poems are.
I was going to tell you forgot a comma, but I forgot where. I think in the 2nd stanza?
 
little-miss-sunshine said...
Feb. 27, 2010 at 8:42 am
A very beautiful poem. The message is really relatable. The only thing was I didn't get the first stanza. Amazing writing, though!
 
thescientistyellow This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 20, 2010 at 7:49 pm
"But frozen on her face, was happiness in her eyes" I love that..Overall a very impressive poem.
 
phebbs said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 8:05 pm
are these song lyrics? the tone of the poem is really smooth. i love it, you're very talented(:
 
Nikiblue said...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 7:42 pm
That was a really pretty piece. It reminds me of those people with cancer. They tell themselves to give up, but they never do until the cancer takes over. Keep up the good work! (:
 
Pensivegurl replied...
Feb. 14, 2010 at 8:04 pm
wow. beautiful. you're really talented. o.0
 
PaperPlanes replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 9:37 pm
Beautiful... I'm really drawn towards this poem, because I feel I can relate so much-- pretty exact, actually. Great job. :)
 
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