Sweet Shadow Dancer

January 20, 2010
By Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It wasn't me and I'll never do it again"


Sweet shadow dancer,
split second spark.
A face in the flicker
blinds an innocent dark.

Sweet shadow dancer
spreads like a cancer.
A sly, hidden snicker
twists my innocent dark.


The author's comments:
I wanted to try a real rhyme scheme this time.
Innocence tends to be portrayed as light... I view it differently.
Knowing can hurt, but is it better to be in the dark? I can see it from both view points. I hope you can, too.

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on Feb. 5 2011 at 8:07 pm
Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It wasn't me and I'll never do it again"

Thank you! I really appreciate that =)

on Feb. 2 2011 at 3:58 pm
silentvocal SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
Don't try to fix what isn't broken

Yeah, It's got such a fluent way to it. I love this so much and the twist it has to it, like you said in your quote. I want to read it over and over, that's how you know it's a good one. :)

on Jun. 5 2010 at 8:59 am
Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It wasn't me and I'll never do it again"

Thank you! I'm so glad you like it =)

Louis GOLD said...
on Jun. 2 2010 at 12:04 pm
Louis GOLD, Paris, Other
17 articles 0 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
Too much isn't enough.

Hi! Again, it was a pleasure to read your work. This is the second piece I read by you, and I love it just as much, which really proves your talent! It's a very nice piece, I particularly like the sonorities, the alliteration, the rhythm... It makes it flow very nicely :)

on Feb. 23 2010 at 4:48 pm
Mopsicle BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
4 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It wasn't me and I'll never do it again"

I really appreciate that. Thanks for reading!

on Feb. 22 2010 at 10:48 pm
aspiring.author.09 PLATINUM, Beaumont, Other
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I loved the rhyming scheme, especially the "Sweet shadow dancer...spreads like a cancer," very clever and it flowed well. Your description and subtlety was outstanding. Great work.


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