Hush, hush

December 18, 2009
Hush, hush, don't cry.
Dream of sweet, sweet lullabies,
rocking away
all the cares that you carry.

Don't be afraid
to take my shoulder to cry;
I will not mind
if you cry there all day long.

Your pain pouring,
flowing out of you on me,
but I don't mind
as long as your burden lightens.

Your whimpers cut,
stab my chest as you sob hard,
so hard you hurt,
as if you could afford pain.

But you are strong,
stronger than I'll ever be.
You amaze me,
yet I see you are still weak.

So let me love
every burden and weight you have;
they create you,
beautiful creature I love.

Hush, hush, don't cry.
Dream of sweet, sweet lullabies,
rocking away
all the cares that you carry.





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introducing.me_899 said...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 8:07 am
:) aww that was seriously beautiful... it was verry comforting, nd it made me smile
 
sleeplessdreamer replied...
Aug. 16, 2010 at 11:06 am
Thanks. I appreciate all the feedback.
 
babigerl1194 said...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 12:22 pm
it was just a little wordy perhaps. the form makes it look really pretty though! and im sure anybody would love to have you as a friend and for you to say this to them and i know if i saw my friends crying id say something like this. just you made it sound so much more beautiful and soft. it has a soft touch to it, you know? : )
 
sleeplessdreamer replied...
Aug. 13, 2010 at 2:38 pm
Thanks for the comments. This is one of my least favorites, and I totally agree that it's wordy. I'm glad someone finally said something about it.
 
Jynxx said...
Jul. 28, 2010 at 8:25 pm

this was endearing. it could be a song or like a secret lullaby you tell to someone who was having a bad day like you were.

this poem was cute. i liked it a lot

 
Lost-In-Life said...
Jun. 30, 2010 at 7:00 pm
Aw! I totally see why you would love to have someone say that to you. I am deeply moved, which kinda shows how sad I am, but whatever. The only criticism I have is on the flow, I thought it could have flowed better, but other than that, I loved it!  
 
kysh15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 10:24 pm
this is amazing, so easy to connect to
 
awesomeaugust This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 24, 2010 at 4:44 pm
I really liked this. I agree with AguaGem on that line
 
AquaGem This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 29, 2010 at 1:12 am
Liked it a lot! really enjoyed this line "as if you could afford pain".
 
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 3:16 am
Hey this is actually pretty good. I can't write poems to save my life. :) Keep writing!!
 
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