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This rain beating down
against her skin.
She feels all alone
again and again.
She asks herself
“Why me, oh Lord”.
But no one can help her
in this forsaken world.
Yet I’m in my room
thinking of her alone,
and I’m dreaming of her
which she will never know.
She cries out in pain
at this agony of hurt.
The only one that can save her
is none other than her.
She looks in the mirror
and she hates what’s staring back.
Shes about to leave home
she slowly starts to pack.
Yet I’m in my room
thinking of her alone,
and I’m dreaming of her
which she will never know.
She suddenly thinks of me,
and now we’re thinking of each other.
We think about our alikeness
and how we love one another.
She thinks about her self-control
and how that’s all she lacks.
She suddenly hears my voice
and she slowly, then, unpacks.
Yet I’m in my room
and she’s thinking of me too,
and I’m dreaming of her
which she always knew.



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Vashali J. said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 9:38 pm:
woah thats deep, i really did feel alone..the mood is awsome...and im just amazed at how you described urself as another girl...is this based on personal experience, cause it seems too good not to be..its really really good...srry im repetive..but its that good
 
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dreamer_believer said...
Aug. 25, 2009 at 7:06 pm:
wow. i like this a lot, so my comment might be long, so i'll apologize in advance :)

where to start? first off, i like the style of the rhyming poetry. very class. next, i love the way everything flowed, it made the poem so good! finally i have to say that i love the content. it's so deep, so sweet and very heartfelt. seems like you wrote this very easily. but wow, it's a great great poem. i love the ending...the middle and the end...it's just GREAT. 5 stars my friend...... (more »)
 
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