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we're off
he leans in, i
lose my breath
he brushes my cheek
with his hand
blood pumps to my cheeks
i lean my head on his
chest, and he steals my heart
i replace it with his
the moon crwons us with cryptic
wonder, setting us ablaze
with life
his smile brings my soul to the
surface and he whisks it
away, hiding it from the harmful
world around us
he saved me
he protects me
the forest takes us away to
be its new life,
the clearing dissapearing





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Zad B. said...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 8:40 am
I think this is one of the best of your poems! It; svery meaningful...I was feeling my heart squeeze while reading it. 5 stars!
 
Wildheart This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 15, 2009 at 4:12 pm
thanks a lot!!! thnks for checking out so much of my work, i really appreciate it!!!
 
Andrnick replied...
Jan. 4, 2010 at 10:01 pm
I love it but it was kind of weird with the stealing of the heart from a guy but it's excellent.
 
mandygale77 said...
Sept. 20, 2009 at 11:48 am
I loved the emotion and description you put into that. It's really great. You have some spelling problems throughout, but generally it's really good.
 
FlamableFyre This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 5, 2010 at 4:03 pm
ya i know i have some spelling problems, i always do. i didnt know that you could copy and paste...ugh but anyway thanks sooo much!
 
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