Cemetary at Sunset MAG

July 22, 2009
By Raven Diltz SILVER, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
Raven Diltz SILVER, Bloomsburg, Pennsylvania
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Here are the remainders:
The empty cigarette packs.
The frozen silk flowers.
The promises we never keep.

The gaudiness in the sky
Is only hope in the face
Of useless mourning.

And puddles of tears become salt licks, dear.
You're sensible. You understand.

So I crisscross across crosses' shadows.
And I leap over dusty, disintegrating love.
I stroke away the salt in the grass
With the solid thump, thump, thump
Of a girl who's going places
Far, far from here.



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on Apr. 23 2010 at 10:43 am
LittleBritt PLATINUM, Washington, New Jersey
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awesome word choice. i love the "crisscross across crosses" and the "and puddles of tears become salt licks, dear." gorgeous poem. congrats on getting published!

on Mar. 31 2010 at 9:29 am
inspired_542 SILVER, Wausau, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
All nature is but art unknown to thee
-alexander pope

i love this poem!! u did an awsome job!!!!

on Mar. 31 2010 at 8:55 am
x0x0Luckyx0x0 SILVER, Enterprise, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"Killing under the cloak of war is still murder.."-Albert Einstein.

I really liked this:] I love the voice and the descriptions. Great work:]

<3


on Mar. 30 2010 at 10:39 pm
enchanted4yu PLATINUM, Calabasas, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the sky is the limit when there are footprints on the moon"

This has such a nice beat and tone. I like how you seem to be speaking to the girl throughout the whole poem.  Great Job!

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on Mar. 30 2010 at 10:04 am
ItsAGiftShop, Alliance, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
"the wind tells of a story listen"

this is super awsome!!

on Mar. 29 2010 at 2:11 pm
FlyleafFreak DIAMOND, Loveland, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"I have faith in fools;self confidence my friends call it"~Edger Allan Poe
"In this world of infinite insanity, your friends are the best psychiatrists you will ever have."~Me

Wow, this is AMAZING! I love the rythym and can immensly undertstand it. Great job, 5/5.

supi said...
on Mar. 29 2010 at 11:04 am
THIS IS REALLY GOOD.


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