As Daytime Melts Into The Night

June 12, 2009
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As daytime melts into the night
Shadows emerge, long and slim
Our sun's presence fades out of sight

The darkness makes me shiver with fright
The sun's light is growing dim
As daytime melts into the night

Midnight monsters just might bite
Unnoticed, they'll steal a hand or limb
Our sun's presence fades out of sight

My hands shake and my face is white
The ghastly streets are just so grim
As daytime melts into the night

I gasp as my heart squeezes tight
Anxiety flows over my cup's brim
Our sun's presence fades out of sight

I hope I'll be alright tonight
Though the fog makes my eyesight swim
As daytime melts into the night
Our sun's presence fades out of sight.





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xoxokelseyxoxo said...
Jan. 19, 2010 at 1:03 pm
I really like this its absolutly amazing. really enjoyed the rhyme it flowed very nicely.
 
despurlock This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 18, 2009 at 8:37 pm
I love your villanelle! You did a really good job! Can't wait to read some of your other work!!!
 
QuestionAuthority1128 said...
Dec. 7, 2009 at 8:42 pm
This poem is very unique and intruiging! (did I spell intruiging wrong...) Anyway, good job! It's amazing how many rhymes you came up with for "im" and "ight." I would have been, like, totally stuck. Keep up the good work!
 
Dreamer1 said...
Sept. 24, 2009 at 4:52 pm
Om--gosh-- I love it! favorites!
 
MiuBlaze This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 14, 2009 at 8:24 am
*gasps*..I love it!!!!!!
Quite an interesting style, I'll have to try out a villanelle. Your topic is so...horrorific!
 
Fangz said...
Sept. 9, 2009 at 1:20 pm
don't mention it, i love to help people be creative. impressive first attempt at villanelle, by the way.
 
FashionGuru said...
Aug. 28, 2009 at 9:18 pm
What is a vivanelle??? I really like this but I don't understand what a vivanelle is exactly. Can someone explain...
 
one_of_a_kind_girl said...
Jul. 26, 2009 at 7:49 pm
oops did i spell that wrong?
 
one_of_a_kind_girl said...
Jul. 26, 2009 at 7:48 pm
yea, im curious, ive never heard of a villanelle? but i like the poem!
 
SaraB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 24, 2009 at 12:44 am
I'd never actually heard of villanelle before, but its interesting, I'll have to try one. Thanks for the comment on my slightly random haiku.
 
Like*Whoa!!! This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 16, 2009 at 4:13 pm
im interested also...so, is the rhythm like ABAABAAB? anyway, it is really good:) i like it alot, and the subject is something that not many poems touch so, great work :)
<3
 
Abigail_W said...
Jul. 12, 2009 at 7:09 pm
I would NEVER have guessed that this was your first try at a vivanelle.
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 4:11 pm
My "In The Presence Of A Spirit" Poem is a simple poem. There was no hand to grab because my hand would just pass right through his.
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 4:07 pm
Thanks sooo much for the comment on my poem "Heart Breaking." I apreciate it.
 
Joanna said...
Jun. 24, 2009 at 3:50 pm
I'm intrigued. Can you tell me more about a villanelle?
I liked the poem, I just wish I understood the... formula for lack of better words, more.
 
sallyloco said...
Jun. 23, 2009 at 8:59 pm
awesome! Very beautiful!
 
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