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Together

Without your firm demand
I gently held your hand
And just like grains of sand
We fell through time together.

On your shoulder I did sit
Deadly afraid of that pit
Without a single candle lit
We survived the storm together.

A leering fork in the road
On my shoulders a heavy load
Why you came not with me is a code
We no longer travel together.



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ShernayB. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 3:00 am:
niceeee :)
 
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aivilo said...
Oct. 9, 2009 at 4:39 pm:
i like the phrasing. your word choice and everything paints an intriguing picture!
 
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Chibbie said...
Aug. 8, 2009 at 2:07 am:
that was an intresting poem but hey nice rhyming . wich reminds me what my teacher told me that skinny poeple rhym and fat people free verse. wait out of topic anyway i understood what you ment but try diffrent wording next time.try the free verse. good idea though. please comment on mine okay :)
 
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piratequeen said...
Jun. 5, 2009 at 8:46 pm:
i like coming back to read your work. more so when i find something new to read. i was so happy when i found this poem. now i love it! its great like all of your other work. keep it up!
 
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DinosoarJen This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jun. 3, 2009 at 8:03 pm:
Some of the phrasing was a little difficult, but I really liked all your ideas. Your stuff is really good :]
 
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