Together

May 23, 2009
By bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
bookhugger14 SILVER, Delta, Ohio
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Without your firm demand
I gently held your hand
And just like grains of sand
We fell through time together.

On your shoulder I did sit
Deadly afraid of that pit
Without a single candle lit
We survived the storm together.

A leering fork in the road
On my shoulders a heavy load
Why you came not with me is a code
We no longer travel together.



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on Jan. 10 2010 at 3:00 am
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

niceeee :)

aivilo SILVER said...
on Oct. 9 2009 at 4:39 pm
aivilo SILVER, Circleville, Ohio
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i like the phrasing. your word choice and everything paints an intriguing picture!

on Aug. 8 2009 at 2:07 am
Chibbie1 PLATINUM, Atlanta, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
Reach for the the moon for if you fail you land amongst the stars :)

that was an intresting poem but hey nice rhyming . wich reminds me what my teacher told me that skinny poeple rhym and fat people free verse. wait out of topic anyway i understood what you ment but try diffrent wording next time.try the free verse. good idea though. please comment on mine okay :)

piratequeen said...
on Jun. 5 2009 at 8:46 pm
i like coming back to read your work. more so when i find something new to read. i was so happy when i found this poem. now i love it! its great like all of your other work. keep it up!

on Jun. 3 2009 at 8:03 pm
DinosoarJen DIAMOND, Scottsville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Just another casualty.
It's sad but true.
And even dead I'm still ahead
of most of you.

Some of the phrasing was a little difficult, but I really liked all your ideas. Your stuff is really good :]


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