Breathing Glass

May 6, 2009
By AshleyAngel7 PLATINUM, Cincinnati, Ohio
AshleyAngel7 PLATINUM, Cincinnati, Ohio
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As I breathe in the glass cuts my throat.
Im bleeding but it's not a medical issue.
Its Satan's blood, blacker than black, now filling newly owned property.
Everywhere the dark blood reaches, carresing the sharpest shards, I find myself to loathe.


The author's comments:
This poem is about my life and how hard it is for me to get through the day. Air is nessecary for life so therefore breathing glass is just a metaphor for how living for me is a nothing but a daily suffering.

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on May. 14 2009 at 8:34 pm
banana PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Au Contraire... I think this is an extremely beautiful poem. Yes, it's blunt - but it needs to be. So short and simple and yet so deep and moving. Keep it up!

on May. 14 2009 at 1:32 am
MariaMarie DIAMOND, Washington Court House, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Life's a mountain on a beach"-Unknown
"Will: This is either madness or brilliance. Sparrow: It's remarkable how often those two traits coincide."-Pirates of the Caribbean:Curse of the Black Pearl.

It's ok but a bit blunt for a poem. Some people may like this style but try and smooth your lines together. -making them seem like they belong there.. try a bit of rhyme.


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