Sent Away

April 29, 2009
By Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov


One hour to pack,
Our lives into bags,
We may never come back,
So what can I put in the bags?

They are not large enough,
For all that I treasure,
I start packing my stuff,
But I can't pack pleasure.

How do they expect us,
To pack all of our things,
And sit quietly on a bus,
Waiting for what the next day brings?

When we have only a suitcase or two,
And no time or moving trucks,
Can you blame me for whispering anew,
"Sometimes the government really sucks!"?


The author's comments:
This is a piece about when people are forced to move by their own government. I was inspired when we learned about how even Canada has forced citizens to leave their homes.

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on Jan. 16 2010 at 1:16 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

Thanks! I'll try that

on Jan. 16 2010 at 11:26 am
AppleFox SILVER, Whitby ON, Other
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Favorite Quote:
never give up on something you can't go a day without thinking about

I can really feel the emotions behind this poem. You did a good job with rhyming, but one thing to avoid is to not repeat the same word at the end of a sentance. Differnt words that mean the same thing can make the poem more interesting.

When there is no substitue for a word you can try leaving the word out altogether by creating a sentance that is similar in meaning.

Schubster said...
on Aug. 28 2009 at 10:53 pm
haha, loved it. thanx for checking out my work.

ErumK said...
on Aug. 28 2009 at 1:05 pm
ErumK, Bayan, Other
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I love the first stanza. =)

on Jun. 8 2009 at 4:28 am
FreakyEyed DIAMOND, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"This, too, will pass."

I really love the first line: "One hour to pack,

Our lives into bags..." Very beautiful and hidden, but in a straight-forward manner... five stars!

on May. 25 2009 at 9:21 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
26 articles 0 photos 493 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This happened to 92 Inuit in the 1950's, to all of Japanese descent during World War 2, and to a whole African-American suburb in 1969. I was totally surprised when I found out Canada did that! Thanks so much for all the comments!

on May. 23 2009 at 4:15 am
windswift DIAMOND, Arvada, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
let it burn, suffering teaches the soul; let it grow, love nourishes the heart.

this poem is really good, it shows strong emotion, and even though there was nothing about being sad mentioned i still got the heavy feeling of sadness. if you dont mind me asking, how long ago was this when it happend? i know exactly what the feeling is.

on May. 22 2009 at 12:51 am
RheaD.Ravenfinger BRONZE, Juneau, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
1 Corinthians 13:4-8

I like the rythmn in this poem and it's a sad poem but a good poem. I like it. I didn't know even Canada did that. I knew China did.

on May. 12 2009 at 1:45 am
Monae2013 SILVER, TRACY, California
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I really like this it shows good quality of how people feel. That is actually how i felt when i moved!:)




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