It's All Uphill from Here

April 24, 2009
By hope-man SILVER, Two Rivers, Wisconsin
hope-man SILVER, Two Rivers, Wisconsin
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Light is but an idal, perfection,
Light is philosophy, intangible.
Light is action, action revolution,
But light is not to be negligible.

Dark is but an ideal, wickedness.
Dark is consuming, a glutton of man.
Dark is a trainer of fools, foolishness.
Why doesn't light do whatever it can?

A few good men are present, but dormant.
Leadership, frenzied because of black night.
young followers try to walk, but they can't,
Collapsing, they laugh with liquid delight.

"So why is the world so dark?" asked the voice.
I say, "It must be the winter solstice."


The author's comments:
This is a sonnet. It starts very generally, and then it gives a single example, underage drinking.

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on Jun. 4 2009 at 6:54 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

I like how you explain underage drinking in this.

It's like...good against bad or heaven against hell sort of thing. Great job!

on May. 17 2009 at 7:05 pm
DinosoarJen DIAMOND, Scottsville, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Just another casualty.
It's sad but true.
And even dead I'm still ahead
of most of you.

I didn't get the underage part of it.

I was thinking good vs. evil.

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on May. 15 2009 at 2:46 pm
I think your poem is not bad at all. I've written some really bad poems. The ending was kind of okay but I liked the other parts to it. I found it very interesting. Keep writing!

Abreika GOLD said...
on May. 2 2009 at 3:26 am
Abreika GOLD, Suffolk, Virginia
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Wow i like this it's.... unexplainable!

IRBFGW DIAMOND said...
on May. 1 2009 at 9:12 pm
IRBFGW DIAMOND, Cincinnati, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"Hey, assbutt!" Supernatural, Castiel.

Nice, I like this. It's pretty intellegent, clever, and original. Good job!

Jaquie BRONZE said...
on May. 1 2009 at 8:23 pm
Jaquie BRONZE, West Palm Beach, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
This is certainly one of my favorites: "I will become even more undignified than this, and I will be humiliated in my own eyes." -2 Samuel 6:22

I loved your sonnet. Beautifully composed and I think you really have a gift. Your choice of words is truly inspiring. I beg you, keep writing.

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