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Incomplete Women

Its so hard to compete
with incomplete women
how they carry themselves
how they move around
no respect for themselves
only pulling others down
how they want whats not theirs
or what they can never have
how they don't seem to care
if their on the wrong path
Its actually funny to see
the betrayal in their eyes
every beautiful glistening sparkle
filled with betrayal and lies
But yet in their world,their path isn't sinking
and all the while,its got me thinking
If their always happy, and worry free
Is incomplete truly not the way to be?



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Phantom_Girl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 9, 2010 at 9:59 am:

It's an okay poem all around. The grammar is needs a teensy bit of work and the rhyme flow's a little off. It has a good feel to it but I think it's missing something, context wise.

3/5 stars.

 
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iWriteToExpressThouqhts said...
Oct. 4, 2010 at 1:37 pm:
OMG ! I love this & its a surprise that it only has 4 comments . It should have WAY more ! I loved the whole thing . KEEP IT UP :) please check out & rate my work ? thanks :)
 
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alex9426 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 9:29 pm:
wow this is so good. it really made me think and i love poems that do that
 
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AndThisIsReal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 10:08 am:
Every once in awhile I like a poem, that some one on this site has written, so much that I have to print it out and keep it.
Yours is one of those poems.
Its honestly very very good and unfortunately true.
I'll add it to my favorites also.
Please read, rate, and comment my writing when you have the time.
Thanks in advance. <3
 
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emily12mhs said...
Sept. 13, 2009 at 11:37 am:
I really like this poem that you have written. It describes most girls and women today. The poem you wrote is great but the story behind how it is true in everyday life sure is disappointing. I wish everyday women would stand tall and appreciate life in a positive way, and be complete.
 
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lovehate29 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2009 at 10:30 pm:
Wow! Wow! While I was reading this, I started to smile. It is so true. Wow! You did your thing on this piece. I'm adding this to my favorites. Excellent. Extraordinary. Astonishing. Wow!
 
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