Incomplete Women

April 8, 2009
By WrittenDestinee SILVER, Buckeye, Arizona
WrittenDestinee SILVER, Buckeye, Arizona
5 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What I do is not who I am, but if your fortunate enough to connect with who I am, you may benefit from what I do."


Its so hard to compete
with incomplete women
how they carry themselves
how they move around
no respect for themselves
only pulling others down
how they want whats not theirs
or what they can never have
how they don't seem to care
if their on the wrong path
Its actually funny to see
the betrayal in their eyes
every beautiful glistening sparkle
filled with betrayal and lies
But yet in their world,their path isn't sinking
and all the while,its got me thinking
If their always happy, and worry free
Is incomplete truly not the way to be?


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on Nov. 9 2010 at 9:59 am
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

It's an okay poem all around. The grammar is needs a teensy bit of work and the rhyme flow's a little off. It has a good feel to it but I think it's missing something, context wise.

3/5 stars.


on Oct. 4 2010 at 1:37 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
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Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

OMG ! I love this & its a surprise that it only has 4 comments . It should have WAY more ! I loved the whole thing . KEEP IT UP :) please check out & rate my work ? thanks :)

on Feb. 1 2010 at 9:29 pm
literaryaddict PLATINUM, Albuquerque, New Mexico
23 articles 3 photos 157 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We're almost there and no where near it. All that matters is that we're going." Lorelai Gilmore, Gilmore Girls
"The whole theory of modern education is radically unsound." Lady Bracknell, The Importance of Being Earnest, Oscar Wilde

wow this is so good. it really made me think and i love poems that do that

on Nov. 6 2009 at 10:08 am
AndThisIsReal PLATINUM, Broadalbin, New York
31 articles 0 photos 81 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dans chaque fil il y a un debut.

Every once in awhile I like a poem, that some one on this site has written, so much that I have to print it out and keep it.

Yours is one of those poems.

Its honestly very very good and unfortunately true.

I'll add it to my favorites also.

Please read, rate, and comment my writing when you have the time.

Thanks in advance. <3

emily12mhs said...
on Sep. 13 2009 at 11:37 am
I really like this poem that you have written. It describes most girls and women today. The poem you wrote is great but the story behind how it is true in everyday life sure is disappointing. I wish everyday women would stand tall and appreciate life in a positive way, and be complete.

on Aug. 31 2009 at 10:30 pm
ShernayB. DIAMOND, Southfield, Michigan
62 articles 1 photo 881 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Some things will never change"---Tupac

Wow! Wow! While I was reading this, I started to smile. It is so true. Wow! You did your thing on this piece. I'm adding this to my favorites. Excellent. Extraordinary. Astonishing. Wow!


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