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The Moutian of No Return

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Bailey C.
The Moutian of No Return
Summary: With the dead carcass behind me I find a stump sitting about ten feet off the trail and take a seat. The adrenaline is wearing off and it is starting to set in. The fact that I just did what no one person has ever done before. I can't take credit for all of it though if it was not for the help of my fallen comrades this would have never happened. They lost their lives so that i could accomplish my goal. I forever will have respect for them. A prayer for my friends and a long drive home is all I have left to do.





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Cat521 said...
Dec. 25, 2013 at 8:20 pm
I can tell it's good, just a little more work and it could be truly amazing.
 
chewie said...
Dec. 24, 2013 at 8:59 pm
awesome story!
 
bethanyella7 said...
Dec. 24, 2013 at 11:52 am
Great job!  It was a cute expansion of an urban legend.  Nice work kiddo!
 
Cat521 said...
Dec. 24, 2013 at 11:38 am
It's quite good but just consider using some imagery to place the reader into the story, so they feel almost a part of it. 
 
BigBay123 replied...
Dec. 24, 2013 at 9:51 pm
Thank you i tried really hard on this
 

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