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Blood red

Blood red
Summary: Red is a teen-aged girl living in The Village to the North, nick named Red after her red hair and the legend of Little Red riding hood. She is the youngest fighter and the only female fighter in her village. she helps her village fight their mortal enemies of more than a hundred year the Village to the South.And it just so happens that the Village to the South is a village inhabited by mutant wolves. Red is also the descendant of a whole blood line of renowned fighters; she is the only one that can save her village, so what happens when she is bitten?

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bluetopazeyez said...
Nov. 12, 2012 at 10:32 pm
this story kept me on the edge of my seat!!!!! you had a lot of repetitave word, but it was still a great story to read!!!
french_silk27 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 8:15 pm
I think this is great! You have wonderful word choice, and a very original plotline that's intriguing and mysterious. I would try to slice it up a little more so it's easier to swallow. But other than that, I love it! Good luck with the rest of it! :)
LockLemon said...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 5:20 pm
It was pretty good, you have very good imagery and style. The storyline was interesting, intriguing, and captivating. However I do think you need to use commas and apostrophes MUCH more often, and this was good for a rough draft but not a final one. :)
FluteFreak said...
Dec. 29, 2011 at 8:27 am
This was awesome. you did a really good job with keeping the action moving and I want to read more. However, I would suggest that you reread it. You change from past tense to present tense at some points and I also caught some misused words throughout the piece, like in the third paragraph "new" should be "knew."
MoraleAsh said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 7:20 pm
So I think this has a really intense and interesting story line. It reminds me of a mix of the new movei Red Riding Hood and the book Shiver by Maggie Stiefvater. The imagery is really great and I want to read more! My suggestions for change: you really need to re-look over everything because I caught some misued words (like "hear" for "here" and things line that). There is also a change tense or two. That could be fixed with just looking over it. Also, Red's first point of view has the world "... (more »)
Fayrouz This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Dec. 26, 2011 at 3:45 pm
I admit I didn't read all of it, but I did read most of it and I really like the fresh imagery your writing brings up. The voice is terrific and keeps the story real. I didn't notice too many grammar/spelling mistakes, which is good, although I did see some things that I believe could be eliminated with a little more careful proofreading. The beginning is definitely something that pulls the reader in, but this isn't my favorite genre so I thought you did pretty well since I kept reading :) Good ... (more »)

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