are you planning to continue this? because i think it has a lot of potential to be turned into a longer story!
but i do love it the way it is, not too cliche and every so sweet. i love the name 'january snow'- how'd you come up with that?
And by the way, when did you create an account?
Secondly, the girl's appearance is a little cliche. Who's been reading Beautiful Creatures? But overall, nice job, lil sissy