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Don't Need Anyone

Author's note: It's also humor or mystery, but it only allowed one tag:P
Enjoy. Don't let Renee get too crazy.
Author's note: It's also humor or mystery, but it only allowed one tag:P
Enjoy. Don't let Renee get too crazy.  « Hide author's note
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Chapter 3

It didn’t take Lena long to pick up on my mildly depressed mood. Her guess was a bit off, though.

“Abstinence starting to get to you?”

This earned us several odd looks as we passed through the halls. “Maybe we should find a different word for that,” I advised. “People are looking at me funny.”

Lena shrugged. “Dear, people are always looking at you funny. This just gives them another reason.”

We’d reached my locker.
No more until they get rid of copy and paste.
I spun it savagely, taking out my frustration on a poor, inanimate object. “Whatever. That’s not why I’m upset, anyway.”

She was quiet for a minute. I took it as a sign of comprehension.

“Oh.” Her voice was softer now. “Ren, we’ve been over this—there’s nothing you can do. It’s up to the police and your parents.”

I scoffed. “My parents? Yeah, ‘cause we both know how well they get things done. And the police gave up months ago.”

It took a lot to make Lena awkward, so I suppose I should have felt accomplished. Instead I just felt slightly guilty. “Even if that’s the case, there’s nothing you can do, Ren,“ she told me firmly.

‘Nothing I can do’? I thought she knew me better. “I can look. I can search. I can ask people. Heck, I bet there are freshman at this school who know more about his whereabouts than the police.”

Lena leaned against the locker beside mine. She already had all of her stuff—when she actually chose to get here early, she got here early. “I’m not going to bother arguing with you, Ren. G-d knows how stubborn you can be. It was like pulling teeth just to get you to agree to lay off dating for a while. Just have a little faith, OK?”

A book toppled from my locker as it opened, and I reflexively squatted to avoid it. As I did, I felt small pops in my knees and suddenly I was no longer squatting, I was sitting on my butt, whimpering. Yes, whimpering. As if I didn’t already feel pathetic enough.

Lena knelt down, concerned. “Ren? Are you going to be alright? Should I get the nurse?” At least she didn’t ask if I was alright. Because then I’d have to scream at her.

“No, I’ll manage.” Somehow. I didn’t need to be humiliated anymore than I already had been, and missing more classes wouldn’t be very healthy for my sickly grades.

“You’re too tough for your own good,” Lena informed me, lending a hand to help me up. I took it, straightening my legs agonizingly. It didn’t help that I had to pull myself up with my left hand.

“If I was as tough as you think I am, I wouldn’t have just done a butt plant.” And I wouldn’t be crying in my room at night over Jared. But I didn’t need to share that bit.

Lena didn’t deign that with a response, but I heard a snort, and when I saw where it came from, I scowled.

Leave it to Cole to see my public display. Leave it to him.

“You have something to say?” I inquired brightly.

He forced a poker face. “No, I believe everything’s already been said. See you in math.” And he booked it out of there.

Lena turned to me and raised her brows. No words needed to be said.

“What?” I grumbled. “He snorted at me.”

“Yeah. And you spoke to him.”

I stuck my tongue out at her. Way to seem mature, Renee. “Not speaking to guys was not in the rules. You just said don’t date them. I’m not dating Cole, so get off my back.”

She rubbed her arms as if chilled. “Cold much? Fine, you can talk to him, but if you do anything else, Ren, I swear….” Her glare spoke volumes.

“I won’t!” I hurried to assure her. “Promise.”

Awkward moments may be the life of books and screenplays, but in reality, they suck. Very, very much.

Chad and I had spoken to each other for the first time in months the day before, so the atmosphere between the two of us was…less than comfortable, to say the least.

So I really didn’t expect him to talk to me again.

“Umm…any progress on the, uh, case?” The question between the “umms” and “uhs” made me stiffen. If he was so curious why didn’t he get involved himself?

“No, not really.” Second time in a row I’d said “No” in response to his pretty much pointless questions. Perhaps it would become a trend.

This time, my answer didn’t completely shut him down. “Is there anything I can…do?”

I probably shouldn’t have been that surprised. After all, he’d been Jared’s best friend. But this kid had sat on his skinny ar.se for months, so this was straight out of the blue.

“I don’t know, you tell me,” I answered, a bit sharper than necessary. “What can you squeeze into that terribly tight schedule of yours to help your former best friend?” For once, I didn’t feel bad about my harshness. He deserved it.

Chad at least had the decency to look hurt. “My best friend,” he mumbled. “Not former best friend. I—I’ll tell the police places he liked to hang out.”

I intertwined my fingers, studying them intently. This just got more and more interesting. “It’s appreciated,” I allowed, not bothering to look at him. “Though I doubt it’ll do much.” Always the pessimist.

Chad seemed to be studying me as much as I was my hands, but I didn’t recognize it. “It’s always worth a try.”

Finally, something I agreed with.

People’s memories never cease to amaze me.

In French, we were reviewing the famille, or the family. We had to list each of our family members. When I added “Mon frère”, Madame started.

“You have a brother?” she asked, completely shameless.

Mmhmm, I have a brother. You know, that boy who lived with me the past fifteen and a half years of my life.

“Yes I do, Madame.”

She fidgeted with her pointer. “Oh. Well…Jeremy, how about you?”

The kid next to me—the junior I’d been considering, in fact—took his turn, and all the while I just marveled at how sieve-like some people’s minds seemed to be.

She could’ve just wanted to forget the closest thing to a scandal our small town’s ever had.

But what depresses me is that she succeeded.

Cole was already in his seat when I arrived. Drawing again.

I tried to see what it was without being too obvious. Clearly I failed, because he turned to me and hoisted the sketchpad up so I could see it easily. “You obviously want to see my newest ‘pretty’ drawing, so there you go.”

I barely resisted sticking my tongue out for the second time that day. Still, I was too curious to decline.

This one was a flat, sloping plain. The sun had barely risen, and the only thing to adorn the flat, lifeless fields was a lone tree, devoid of leaves. It was all shaded very darkly.

“This is quite cheery. Making it for Mother’s Day? You’re a little early.”

He lowered the pad indifferently. “Who would draw a cheery sketch in math class?” he pointed out. “There would be no inspiration.”

I couldn’t argue with that.

Lena arrived late—she must’ve been using up all of her on-timeness for the beginning of school. When she saw the two of us leaning towards one another, her eyes spoke volumes. I popped back into my seat and sat there primly. Lena’s eyes were suspicious, Cole’s amused and questioning.

“It’s nothing,” I muttered out of the side of my mouth. He evidently disagreed, but didn’t press the matter.

Class went a bit faster than History, which wasn’t exactly the greatest comparison, but it was something. The bell eventually rang, signaling my freedom. I was about to head out with Lena when Cole’s voice stopped me.

“Could you wait up for a second?”

I could wait up for a second, but I’d grant him more.

“Sure.” Thankfully, Lena was already out the door.

He packed his stuff in a business-like manner. I stood for a few moments, bouncing on the balls of my feet, before asking impatiently, “Was there a reason you wanted me to stay?”

Cole stopped sorting his books to look at me with what was almost a sheepish expression. “Sorry. I wanted to ask what the problem was earlier today?”

I clenched my fist almost unconsciously. “You seemed so concerned when we talked.”

He flashed me a grin. “I show concern in my own special way. But really, what was the matter?”

I debated whether or not to tell him, and decided it couldn’t hurt. “I have Osgood-Schlotters. It’s a knee condition common in runners, it’s why I’ve got it. It’s really bad in both knees and is most often the reason that I land on my butt. I also have elbow tendonitis that hurts when I straighten it or pull on it. That’s the matter.”

Cole looked almost sympathetic. “That must really stink. I’m assuming you don’t do running anymore?”

What was with the curiosity? I looked at the clock and grimaced. Whatever was with it, it was going to make me late. “Nope. Now, if you’ll excuse me, if I don’t go now, I’m going to be late.”

His eyes danced. “You actually care?”

“Yes I do,” I retorted, aloof and proper. Then I stalked out of the room.

I still didn’t get to class on time.

I crumbled the small yellow slip in my hand. If I got one more, my parents would murder me. That was hardly an exaggeration.

Then again, Lena might beat them to it.

When I caught up to her, she was practically steaming. I’d gotten a telling off deserving of a nanny, and had been forced to swear, on oath, that I would never, ever do that again.

By saying “that”, I thought I bypassed my oath quite nicely.

All of the shows on were cr.ap, and without running I had no life, so I had a few options.

1. Listen to Muse.

2. Obsess over Jared.

3. Obsess over Cole.

Since obsessing over Jared always made me depressed, I chose 1 and 3. Of course, I was supposed to be avoiding all of the boy fantasies, but as long as they remained fantasies, it was alright, in my book.

I think I'm drowning


I wanna break this spell that you created

Really positive lyrics, definitely gave me a morale boost. But they did succeed in making me feel slightly less pathetic.

Just slightly.

My dreams were filled with barren plains and haunted wells, bleeding into one another.

I blamed it all on Cole.
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Just.A.Dream said...
Feb. 18, 2011 at 4:50 pm

I know that you have had a TON of feedback on Inkpop. And they did such a good job with the feedback I really don't have any criticism. :o

My only question is: people date that much at thirteen now? To me, this story sounds like it'd be from someone older than a thirteen year old, but that's just me.

I think I'm going to finish reading this on Inkpop because it was amazing. :)

You definitely need to send some queries about publishing because it was amazing. I'd definitely... (more »)

OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 18, 2011 at 6:54 pm

Hehe thank you Angie! =D


....thirteen? o_O


I think you're thinking of I'm Just Thirteen. ;D That's a different book.  Renee is 16.

Just.A.Dream replied...
Feb. 18, 2011 at 7:28 pm
OH WAIT, I got that from the flashback. :o Whoops, haha. I knew I read something about her being 13 in this story. :P
OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 19, 2011 at 2:01 pm
Ah, yes, that would be why. XD
reading_under_h2o said...
Feb. 12, 2011 at 12:15 pm
This is a really goood book, are you going to continue writing?
OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 13, 2011 at 1:03 pm
Thanks! =) If you mean continue writing the book, I've already finished it. =D
charmiypiggy said...
Feb. 11, 2011 at 5:58 am
Wow. I really loved this! I've read over some of the other comments, and pretty mch anything I say will be a repeat of someone else's. So I just wanna say that this is awesome, and I would love to read more. Excellent writing!
OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 13, 2011 at 1:01 pm
Thank you! =) 
Azrael said...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 9:08 pm
 Our time is running out, its not from Uprising by Muse but its a line in a song called Time IS Running Out by Muse......
OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 5, 2011 at 11:24 pm
-headdesk- I found out a couple weeks ago--yeah, sorry about that. =P I don't want to edit the chapter 'cause that would take this down for a few weeks.
-DreamForever- replied...
May 21, 2011 at 4:01 pm
I got super excited when I read "headdesk." Fellow nerdfighter?
Elizabeth_Day This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 3, 2011 at 6:31 pm
I really REALLY like this.  The voice is fantastic!  A lot of the time, when I read novels on teen ink, it feels like I have to really push past the first few chapters.  It wasn't like that with your story at all.  I was in Renee's head, saw what she saw, felt what she felt.  Great job!  My only concern is that most of your paragraphs are only one or two sentences, which barely qualifies them as paragraphs.  PLEASE post more.  I'm totally into this st... (more »)
OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 4, 2011 at 10:05 am

Thank you! =D I'm glad you like it. I probably won't post more until they disable copy & paste, but the whole thing is posted on inkpop. =)


And I will definitely try to check that out. =D

Annerdy said...
Jan. 26, 2011 at 4:55 pm

I read beyond the first chapter because that's what thorough critiquing is all about. And heck, it was just THAT good. (: I liked the voices you gave each character so they were witty, humorous and memorable. There was never a boring patch anywhere so the storyline flowed very easily. The writing was definitely fantastic because it was almost like a movie was playing in my head. (: If this was published, I would probably purchase this novel in a heartbeat. The way you incorporated humor, pain... (more »)

OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 26, 2011 at 6:55 pm

Haha thank you so much! XD


I intend to keep writing! D= -runs away from pitchforks- 


And yes, I just realized that irony. xD

rainbowwaffles said...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 3:06 pm

I really liked the first two chapters, but i have a pet peeve of reading when dialogue isn't on separate lines. :( Sorry, I know it's not your fault, just some formatting issue. I'll definitely get around to reading it, though, I want to know what happens next. :D I've seen some of your comments on other people's novels and you seem very helpful. If it's not too much to ask for, (you must be tired of hearing this...) but could you maybe check out mine? It's called The Formation. It's i... (more »)

OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 8:05 pm
Thank you for the comment. =) Don't worry, I have the same pet peeve.  And like I said with lovelycheese, I will certainly try.  I have a busy schedule. =P
Timekeeper This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 24, 2011 at 8:34 pm

I really enjoyed your work--the characters are memorable, unique, and like many have said here, realistic. I think that's one of the things that can make or break a reader's interest, and it's safe to say you pulled it off.

The humor is top notch without being over the top, and it definitely provided a fuel that kept the story moving.

I'll have to check out the rest on InkPop!


OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 6:51 am

=D Thank you for the comment, Timekeeper.  I'm glad you liked it.


I'll try to comment on SuperNOVA when possible. :)

lovelycheese said...
Jan. 22, 2011 at 11:07 pm

I really, really like this novel - it's most definitely one of the best on the site. Your descriptions are really great, and the characters are so realistic. I'm going to read the rest on inkpop(:

And... I hear you give some pretty awesome feedback. So, would you mind reading my novel Celestial? It's on the Sci-Fi/Fantasy section. Thanks(:

OfficialApprover This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 6:50 am
Thank you for the comment. =)  I will definitely try to comment on that--my time is limited, but I'll get to it as soon as possible.

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