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Romeo and Juliet--A Parody

Author's note: I wrote this as a final assignment for our Romeo and Juliet novel study in English. I hope...  Show full author's note »
Author's note: I wrote this as a final assignment for our Romeo and Juliet novel study in English. I hope people will help me by giving me a bit of constructive criticism about plot, pacing, writing technique, dialogue, etc.  « Hide author's note
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The Midnight Intruder

I awoke to a strange tapping sound. There would be one tap, a short pause and then another tap. It seemed to be coming from my window.
Reluctantly, I got out of bed and dragged my feet across the cold floor to the window. I looked to see if it was the thick oak tree’s branches tapping at the window, but the night was completely calm. Suddenly, a pebble hit the lower corner of my window. Puzzled, I opened it and looked down into the garden below.
“Anybody there?” I whispered out into the night.
“It’s Romeo, my love.” The voice came from the oak tree.
“What are you doing here? I called the cops on you before; I’ll do it again.” I reached to close the window, but Romeo scrambled to the end of the branch and held the window. “Let go or I’ll scream and wake up my dad. He’ll kill you; you’re Mr. Montague’s son.”
“If no longer being a Montague would make you love me, then I’ll give up my name.”
“Your name doesn’t matter to me, you’re a stalker whether you’re a Montague or not!”
“But sweet Juliet, it is written in the stars: Romeo and Juliet, a love for all time!”

“Ah, Romeo and Juliet are truly star-cross’d lovers.”
The stranger was lurking in the shrubs not five feet from the oak tree, writing everything down. Of course, he was taking a bit of creative license and only using the basic ideas from this event. Romeo visiting his love’s balcony after the party was the perfect demonstration of the fact he couldn’t get her off his mind.
“But, soft! What light through yonder window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun!” he murmured as he scribbled the words in his notebook. “The beauty of the moon is pale in comparison to the beauty of Juliet; I can hardly blame Romeo for falling for her charms. But why does the lady not return his love?”
He wanted to give the lovers some privacy, but he also knew this would be a great inspiration for a new play. The tragedy of Romeo and Juliet would speak to the heartsick and the love-struck. It would be a great romance, one that would stand the test of time and become famous throughout the world.

“Go away. If you leave and I never see you again; I won’t tell the cops about this.”
“But why would I never want to see my love again?” His dark eyes seemed to be pleading with me. “Will you be my girlfriend?”
“No! I’m in a happy relationship with Paris; I don’t want to be your girlfriend.”
I tried to slam the window shut but Romeo held tightly onto it. I went back into my room to find something to throw at him. I had an empty flower pot on the floor (my poor flowers had died long ago because I forgot to water them) so I grabbed that and walked back to the window.
“I see it in your eyes; you love me as well. We could get married and run away from this place.”
“I don’t love you and we’re not getting married, Romeo.”
The branch he sat on was a bit lower than my window, so I held the flower pot above his head and casually dropped it. The flower pot broke over his head and he swore.
“My love, why would you do such a thing?”
“Leave me alone, you creep.”
The flower pot landing on his head didn’t seem to affect him much, but it did make him let go of my window. I quickly shut it and locked it. Who knew what he would try to do? He was obviously mentally ill; you had to feel sorry for him. But the more he stalked me, the less sympathy I had for him. At this point, my sympathy was almost nonexistent.
I went back to bed and tried to fall asleep, but I had the strange feeling that someone was watching me. For a while I kept rolling over, trying to find a comfortable spot, but I just couldn’t get to sleep. The feeling that someone was watching me was so overwhelming that I turned on the light and looked around my room. I almost screamed when I saw Romeo’s face looking in through my window.
When Romeo saw that I knew he was there, he scrambled down the oak tree and ran off, jumping and barely clearing the garden wall. I kept looking out my window for quite some time, sure that I had seen something in the shrubs move. After staring at the shrubs for almost an hour, I gave up and went back to bed, exhausted.
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Miss-Jr-Teen said...
Feb. 10, 2016 at 7:35 pm
This is really good i like to twist on the original your parody was simply amazing.
Dragon_Heart said...
Jan. 29, 2016 at 12:18 pm
Wow this version is better than the one they had us read at school XD
spinnerofyarnsThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Dec. 19, 2015 at 9:25 pm
I never liked Romeo and Juliet, but your parody is quite amusing! Your Juliet is ever so much more sensible than the original character. Just one thing -- on page 4, you say that Romeo "lived a long, happy life in medieval London," but I believe the Elizabethan period (Shakespeare's time) was actually during the Renaissance, not the Middle Ages.
SarahBlum said...
Dec. 5, 2015 at 11:24 pm
Oh my gosh! In LOVE with this story! A++ job! @LittleInker I was actually thinking the same thing with the Shakespeare/Juliet fic. That would be so ironic and adorable.
LittleInker said...
Sept. 4, 2015 at 8:42 am
I like this. I like how the stranger is constantly following Romeo and Juliet around writing down the tale of their misadventured love. (Gasp!) Future fanfic between Young William Shakespeare and Juliet Capulet???????
Thefanatasticagirlie101 said...
Mar. 10, 2015 at 12:33 pm
This was really good. It lightened my mood a lot. Star-croosed lovers weren't meant to be, so yaya!!!
itserratic said...
Sept. 24, 2014 at 10:10 pm
your so cool. you changed a boring old story into a funny parody. 
reubenater100 said...
Jun. 29, 2014 at 10:13 am
Amazing parody. i am studying romeo and juliet at school just now and am thouroughly sick of it so it is good to find something with a bit of humour in it. keep up the good work
WOWriting said...
Apr. 22, 2014 at 9:20 am
I really like this parody. I've never read Romeo and Juliet, only heard about what happens in it, but this is still really great. I think it ended a bit abruptly and you could have maybe developed Romeo and Juliet's relationship so that something more happened with them to inspire the rest of Shakespeare's play, but it's still great and I generally like the story. It's amazing.
CurlyGirl17 said...
Mar. 9, 2014 at 9:11 pm
This was cute! I LOVE parodies; you did great at retelling the story. I'd really appreciate it if you checked out my story, The Sky's the Limit in the Romance section- you do such a good job! By the way, congrats on all the comments :)
T. Grace said...
Feb. 3, 2014 at 6:12 pm
This looks like a very cute piece! I compete in a homeschool highschool speech and debate league and I love preforming funny pieces as one of my speeches, and I would be interest in useing this one. However the leauge requires the piece to have been published with a copyright data and as well as and ISBN number. So I was wondering if this has been published or if you would even allow me to use is in my compitition? 
Elizabeth C. said...
Aug. 17, 2013 at 12:27 am
So funny !! Loved it
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 19, 2013 at 1:44 am
Thank you! :)
AgentK said...
Jun. 17, 2013 at 1:48 pm
Its great!! I love the twist you plled on the old story... More! More!
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jun. 22, 2013 at 2:14 am
Thank you very much! :)  I'm glad you enjoyed it.
rhea752 said...
Jun. 6, 2013 at 1:45 pm
Lol this is so funny!!! I had to read Romeo & Juliet this year so it's great to see such an awesome parody after having to know the play inside out :P
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jun. 16, 2013 at 3:08 pm
That's great!  And thank you so much for commenting. :)
Imagineer said...
May 5, 2013 at 9:54 pm
That was awesome, great resolution.
CarrieAnn13 replied...
May 9, 2013 at 1:30 am
Thank you very much! :)
Laugh-it-Out This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 1, 2013 at 10:31 pm
We just finished Romeo and Juliet in school, so I know the play realy well, too well. Great job and really nice story. It was funny.

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