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Romeo and Juliet--A Parody

Romeo and Juliet--A Parody
Summary: Juliet Capulet is just your average teenage girl until a chance meeting at a community dance changes her life forever. She meets Romeo Montague, who immediately starts stalking her, claiming they are meant to be together. For Juliet, this is just too much; she calls the police. How did such a story inspire the great William Shakespeare? It's not how you think!

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Mystiecub said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 9:51 am
Interesting is the only word I have to describe it. Great job :D
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 1:10 pm
Thank you! :)
Healing_Angel This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 12:25 am
Clever! Did NOT see that coming! :) Love the twist! :)
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 3, 2011 at 12:35 am
Thank you!  I'm glad you liked it. :)
MissColleen said...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:21 pm
This is really good Carrie! At first, I was a little confused with the narrator shift, but I got used to it right away. Also, at some points, it was a little awkward to read just because it was written with an odd flow. I like this idea that you're going with but the whole modernized Romeo and Juliet thing is way overdone in my opinion. I honestly would have liked it better if you set it in Shakespeare's time, I think it could have gone even better. Overall, a wonderful job!
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Aug. 1, 2011 at 11:50 pm
Thanks for the feedback!  But Romeo and Juliet wasn't set in Shakespeare's time.  Shakespeare was writing a play based on earlier poems/writings. :)
JustAnotherOwl said...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 7:04 pm

I read the first chapter...

I liked this. It was an interesting twist, creative and original. I loved that she actually liked Paris.

The sentences could be a bit choppy at times. If you maybe work on the flow of the story and I think it would be great!

CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 7:12 pm
Thanks for taking the time to read my novel!  And thank you for the feedback; I'll keep that in mind. :)
MissDarkCross said...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 7:56 pm

I liked it..but I don't like the fact of how people want to create a younger version of Romeo and juliet. I love William's work the way it is.


You could have  made more paragraphs..it makes your work more neat, so I believe.

Overall..pretty good.

CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 27, 2011 at 7:59 pm
Thank you!  And what do you mean by 'a younger version of Romeo and Juliet'?
whitstar27 said...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 10:42 pm
I liked the story. What a creative idea! I liked how it was different from the original story, yet in a way similar. I think that the ending could have been developed better, though.
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 5:09 pm
Thanks for the feedback! :)
Annie.C said...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 6:18 pm

I like how you grab the reader's attention and make us want to read the book.

I think you could make the sentences transition better though. Make it all run smoothly...

CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 6:53 pm
Thank you for the feedback!
Shayne121 said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 3:39 pm
I thought it was really good...I think that you could fine tune some things and give the work more detail to make it even better, but other than that it was really enjoyable.
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 7:23 pm
What do you think I could 'fine tune'?
Megan.J.B said...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 6:59 pm
I liked the ideas, and there were many times when I found myself almost laughing and yet, there was a very unhuman element to the story. Yes, there was comedy, but all other emotions were non-existant and the dialogue was fairly forced. I do regard comedy highly though, it's something not everyone has the ability to do :)
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 12, 2011 at 8:29 pm
Why do you think the dialogue sounded forced?
Megan.J.B replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 10:44 am
Well, to me it doesn't sound natural, especially when Juliet is speaking. One thing that I do to fix this when I write is by saying the dialogue aloud. Dialogue, unforunately is very tricky that I think most teenage writers have difficulty with, including myself. :)
CarrieAnn13 replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 1:09 pm
I think it's fairly realistic.  And yes, I did read it aloud; I do that with all my dialogue.
Megan.J.B replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 6:11 pm
I mean no offence, of course. If you like the way it sounds then I would keep it that way. You enjoying what you write is what matters most.

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