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I read the rest, and I must say, I can't wait to find out what happens next!  I've written more of The Voyages of the Waved Albatross, so if you want to read it, its there.  But that's up to you.  Keep writing!

I love the story, it is original, and mysterious.  The description and imagery is fantastic, though it has room for improvment, as all of our stories do.  This is one of the few books that really have potential.   The only things that need some work:  The dialogue.  It's great, but you should make it more like wild-west speech.  Some sentances made me trip a little, but that can easily be remedied.  Otherwise, a great story, ... (more »)

I have only read the first two chapters, I'll finish the others later, I promise.  I love the story, it's one of the few that I think have real potential.  The description and imagery is fantastic, though it has room for improvment, as all of our stories do.  The only things that do need some work are:  The dialogue, it is very good dialogue, but you should make sound a bit more like wild-west speech.  Some of the sentences make me trip a little bit, but that c... (more »)

Wow! This is absolutley amazing! I really love how you've described your characters, Kay sounds absolutley awesome haha! 
From what I've read of you so far, you're probably one of my favourite wrtiers on TeenInk, I just love how creative you are! I think you should prolong ths book, and get it finished - it would probably be something that would get easily published :') Love it!