Teen Ink

they say the story isn't original. it's been copied. oh my.

You've got a wonderful writing style. Every word paints a picture. It's beautiful. The story itself is nice, too, I'd love to read more of it! I also love the way that there are no names until the very end, and no dialogue. It really adds to this sort of magical tone.

Good job brother i really enjoyed reading your work(:

Your imagery is exquisite and word choice is excellent. Nice work

I love the imagery and the beginning leaves me very curious as to where this going! You clearly have a firm grasp in your mind of what you want the reader to see, and it comes across perfectly, so kudos for that.

All in all, nice read, please continue :)

Thank you!

Amazing use of imagery and a great concept! I'm looking forward to more:) 

GREAT WORK

the imagery that you use is absolutley amazing! :D

This is a very nice beginning. I love the imagery that you used. One quick thought: Some of the sentences seem to have trouble flowing together. Maybe you should combine some of them with a comma or conjunction? It helps move the story along.

WHAT?! is it only one page? man, that's disappointing. i wanted to read more. you should develop this into a book series, with different books for each couple's story. you could call the series "Those That Dance" or something. :-) very cute; great job.

awesome way to gfet to the point(:

Lovely. <3

That's pretty intense man. Good stuff

Thanks! :)