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Summary: Andrielle is desprately searching for her beloved James,believing him to be in trouble.Meanwhile, Alexandria is trying to escape from a marriage arranged by her father to a hideous worm of a man.
Writomania
Extensive vocab, i must say..
Nicely done but if you could only make the language a little more simple, it would we easier to just read it in a flow.. its the flow that really matters..
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ScreamingSilence said...
Feb. 6, 2011 at 5:27 pm:
Feb. 6, 2011 at 5:27 pm:
4.5 out of 5. The beginning seemed wordy and I needed a dictionary. (however I praise your extensive vocab) Other then that excellant start. I look forward to more.
So do you think I should write it in more plain language? I really want to improve it however I can. Thanks soooo much for the feedback :D
Yeah the reason I did that was because I am still writing it, so every time I have three pages written in my notebook, I type them out and paste them :) I know it sounds like a really inconvenient way to do it, but I think better on paper then on a computor. Thanks for commenting!
Annie B
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I like that you split the chapters up to break up the monotomy, but I think you should post both parts at the same time so the entire chapter is readable, because I can't wait for more!
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