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Extensive vocab, i must say..
Nicely done but if you could only make the language a little more simple, it would we easier to just read it in a flow.. its the flow that really matters..
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Yeah the reason I did that was because I am still writing it, so every time I have three pages written in my notebook, I type them out and paste them :) I know it sounds like a really inconvenient way to do it, but I think better on paper then on a computor. Thanks for commenting!
I like that you split the chapters up to break up the monotomy, but I think you should post both parts at the same time so the entire chapter is readable, because I can't wait for more!
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