White Ribbon

January 15, 2011
By EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath


Summary:

They told us we were adopted, part of their tribal family. But I’m still not sure that we’ve escaped the Officials back home. I know that the tribe won’t let me leave this place, and I know that if I go home the City will kill me there.

My brother watches the dance hugging the leg of the woman who tells him she’s his mother. My sister, at least, remembers we are sisters. She knows I do not love the chief’s son.

Eamon holds my waist with strong hands as we dance, and the chief looks on in approval. I think of Lazaro. I think of my kiss with Lazaro, and I see him in the crowd. I meet his eyes with shame.
The crowd is ready to cheer and clap. My wedding is almost over.


EGram

White Ribbon


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on Mar. 16 2011 at 9:14 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

I'm so glad you've finished it and commented!  I have decided to post the next four chapters on Monday (Mar 21) so they should be online by the following weekend!  Please comment again after you read them...I would love to hear what you think!

tudor3x8 GOLD said...
on Mar. 16 2011 at 6:26 pm
tudor3x8 GOLD, Irvine, California
13 articles 3 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened"

Wow! This is really good! You got my attention from the very beginning, when you explained that Ori has a "sense", for a lack of better word. And then you have a scene where both parents die. You have a great start- and I just finished chapter 1.

Great job! I'll definitely continue reading.


on Mar. 16 2011 at 4:44 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

Alright. Done. Could you please post more? It's so amazing and now I really want to know what will happen! (:

on Mar. 14 2011 at 7:04 pm
JustAnotherOwl SILVER, Unknown, New York
6 articles 0 photos 379 comments

Favorite Quote:
"See, we don't really care who you are;
Everyone is capable of looking up and wishing on a star.
So catch it, so contagious, this day-dreamer's disease,
And hope can be your sword, slaying darkness with belief."

"Sanctuary"- Paradise Fears

This is insanely great! I could definitely see it as a published book. I love the characters. I'm only on the seventh chapter, but I'm already sold on it. (:

on Mar. 14 2011 at 5:26 pm
e.c.frances BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments
well... i really want to know what happens with her and "the warrior". I also want to know what the ribbon means.

on Mar. 12 2011 at 1:07 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Wow thank you so much!  I really appreciate it

on Mar. 12 2011 at 12:06 pm
pheebz88 BRONZE, Concord, New Hampshire
2 articles 0 photos 16 comments

Favorite Quote:
It takes ten times as long to put yourself back together as it does to fall apart

This is amazing!!  It seems like you have this really well thought out and that you know exactly where you are going with this!  It's kind of dark but in a good way and it leaves you wanting more!

I could totally see this being a published book...I would definitley buy it!


on Mar. 12 2011 at 11:47 am
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Thanks!  Me too :)

on Mar. 12 2011 at 11:46 am
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Thanks so much for your feedback!  I intend to post the next four chapters by the end of the week.  Please check back next weekend, because I would love to read your comments!

loremipsum said...
on Mar. 11 2011 at 7:25 pm
loremipsum, Lorem, Idaho
0 articles 0 photos 30 comments
This is sooo wonderful! Are you going to post more soon?

on Mar. 11 2011 at 3:37 pm
DaughteroftheTrumpet BRONZE, East Aurora, New York
2 articles 2 photos 214 comments

Favorite Quote:
Washington Irving once said “There is sacredness in tears. They are not the mark of weakness, but of power. They are messengers of overwhelming grief and of unspeakable love.”

its really good:) hope you can post more, and one day get it published:)

on Mar. 8 2011 at 6:20 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

I'm glad you like it!  I hope one day it might be published too.  Right now I'm just working on writing it.  The next four chapters are written, but I still need to edit before I can post them online :)

on Mar. 8 2011 at 6:19 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Thanks!  What questions are you hoping the story will soon answer?  I like hearing input from my readers on which plotlines tug them most.

on Mar. 8 2011 at 4:26 pm
e.c.frances BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
4 articles 0 photos 7 comments

The ribbon thing is really cool... I can't wait to figure out what all the different colors symbolize!

I also want to learn more about the tribe. This is such a cool and suspensful story! I can't wait to figure out what will happen next!


SPAZZMUCH said...
on Mar. 8 2011 at 3:19 pm
OMG! I LOVED IT! SOOOOO GOOD! I HOPE THIS IS PUBLISHED BECAUSE I WOULD LOVE TO SEND A COPY TO MY GRANDCHILDREN!!! 

on Mar. 8 2011 at 3:18 pm
A true talent. Work of art. Such a good story and quite the story-line. Very thrilling. Great Job!

on Mar. 8 2011 at 3:14 pm
AMAZING! You have quite a gift! Such a good story. Please write more! 

on Mar. 7 2011 at 8:17 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Wow!  Thanks so much!

LauraEHarper said...
on Mar. 7 2011 at 8:08 pm
LauraEHarper, Mauldin, South Carolina
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment
This story line is so thrilling and the characters are so real, i feel like i picked this book up off a library shelf. This is the kind of book i would read and love and finish within two days cause i cant put it down. Keep up the good work EGram!

on Mar. 7 2011 at 6:53 pm
EmilyGram BRONZE, Simpsonville, South Carolina
2 articles 0 photos 73 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And by the way, everything in life is writable about if you have the outgoing guts to do it, and the imagination to improvise. The worst enemy to creativity is self-doubt."
Sylvia Plath

Thank you!  I look forward to reading your comments as the plotlines progress!  :)


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