Entwined

October 7, 2012
By Novelist123 BRONZE, Buffalo Grove, Illinois
Novelist123 BRONZE, Buffalo Grove, Illinois
3 articles 7 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Dreams, goals, ambitions - these are the stuff man uses for fuel."
L. Ron Hubbard
US author & science fiction novelist (1911 - 1986)


Summary:

Aria, after a horrible nightmare and a horrible summer, finds herself falling through a portal that takes her to a parallel universe. In the hopes of finding something special within her, the people in this universe, hairless humanoids known as Niklaydas, send her to work with the Warriors.
But there is more to this plot, which Aria soon discovers. Who is Istra, the Monster, the Black Demon? Who is Aria?


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Entwined


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on Oct. 12 2012 at 8:34 pm
Novelist123 BRONZE, Buffalo Grove, Illinois
3 articles 7 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Dreams, goals, ambitions - these are the stuff man uses for fuel."
L. Ron Hubbard
US author & science fiction novelist (1911 - 1986)

Thank you so much! I'll have a second chapter in as soon as possible!

elites5 SILVER said...
on Oct. 12 2012 at 7:02 pm
elites5 SILVER, Langley, Other
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This is a very good start to a story. It grabbed my attention and I want to read more. I want to be a novelist as well and I am slowly working on it. Keep going because it's a great idea. Can't wait to read more.

on Oct. 12 2012 at 5:37 pm
Stella_Val_Illicia GOLD, Salt Lake City, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"In the beginning, the universe was created. This has made a lot of people angry and been widely regarded as a bad idea."
--Douglas Adams

I agree with Monochrome_Panda.  This is wonderful. The only mistake I saw was "dirt had bored holes." I'm a grammar nerd, but the term would be "had born holes." Otherwise, this was one of the best books I've read in a while. I love it and you must write more!

on Oct. 12 2012 at 3:34 pm
Eshshah PLATINUM, Galloway, New Jersey
32 articles 31 photos 239 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The woods are lovely, dark and deep. But I have promises to keep, and miles to go before I sleep." -Robert Frost

This piece is very intriguing! I love your imagery, with both Aria and Istra.  the one recommendation I could make is: please write a second chapter now! I am dying of suspense here!


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